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Valentine's Hope

I've focused on this evening For near a fortnight now Each element planned to perfection Every detail intended to wow I admit that in the past My efforts have been wanting To pack my feelings to a single night At the very least was daunting But not this time I was proud to say I would dazzle her every sense A night complete with all her favorites Sparing no expense With a rose in my teeth, two goblets in hand and attired in a rented tux She passed me bye, slumped on the couch and rambled of how her job sucks I offered some wine, she said "not tonight This day has left me too tired I must review these reports, then get some rest Or tomorrow I'll surely be fired" As I watched her wearily climb the stairs I felt a wave of somber dismay I extinguished all the candle light and sent the cellist away. As I gazed at all my wasted effort I felt an angry rush She didn't acknowledge the time I had spent Just left me alone in the hush As hours passed I realized My anger was surely misplaced I remembered that smile she shows only to me and all of my pain was erased I went upstairs to check on my sweet. and give what support I could If I could reach inside and relieve her stress God knows I certainly would Atop our pedal covered bed In a state of grace she slept Clutching the poem I had left on her pillow still soaked with the tears she had wept I placed a blanket upon her and wiped away her tear then closed my eyes to imagine How to dazzle my love next year.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 12/8/2012 6:58:00 AM
Oh Joe...this is so good...i almost had tears reading how your efforts had gone so unnoticed...then those last two stanzas omg....wow. Well done - Shaz
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Date: 2/25/2011 10:12:00 AM
Congratulations Joe,on your win in Joyce Johnson's contest "Emotional Response". Love, Carol
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Date: 2/23/2011 6:55:00 PM
is there ever such a man in real life?congrats on the win! ^_^
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Date: 2/23/2011 4:46:00 PM
what a man!! really no kidding...what a man..Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 2/23/2011 6:10:00 AM
ooh love this...congrats on the win!!
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Date: 2/23/2011 4:26:00 AM
Congrats Joe on your terrific win in Joyce's contest with this dynamic entry luv.. enjoy your 2nd place win with luv..
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Date: 2/22/2011 8:39:00 PM
Congrats on a well deserved win, Joe. Nice going. Ralph
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Date: 2/22/2011 8:19:00 PM
Hey Joe this takes my heart. What a loving write.Many warm congrats for this win.
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Date: 2/22/2011 8:16:00 PM
Way to go, Joe! Congratulations on winning in Joyce's contest with this entry. It looked like a winner the first time I saw it.
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Date: 2/22/2011 7:45:00 PM
stunning and sweet as life's breath.. can all men be like you, joe?? hearfelt APPLAUSE for the win! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/22/2011 7:21:00 PM
I lvoed this romantic gesture and your sensitivity your tired wife. Lovely. congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/21/2011 4:51:00 AM
Another wonder, Joe. Paints a tender and compassionate scene. Nothing shadey nor dark...only glimmers of hope. A very touching write. Best to you and yours, love, Mikki
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Date: 2/20/2011 7:26:00 PM
lovely read.
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Date: 2/20/2011 7:23:00 PM
Joe, you are a thoughtful and compassionate man. Some fellas just leave when a women is under stress. You not only forgave her for not recognizing all the effort you put into making the night special, but tucked her in and wiped away her tears. Surely she regretted having felt such job-related stress on Valentine's Day. Only a special man could understand this and start planning was to "dazzle her next year." Awesome entry for Joyce's contest. She's going to love this one! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/20/2011 5:34:00 PM
Did this really happen this year? You have described this incident so well with your words and rhyme. You place any reader in a vicarious experience.
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Date: 2/20/2011 5:11:00 PM
I enjoyed this one...I can just picture this..and the sweet moment of reconciliation. BG
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Date: 2/20/2011 4:49:00 PM
Kind of sad but a hopeful uplifting at the end..Enjoyed your story in poetic style..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
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