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Unsettled Night

Unsettling the evening brings with it cold As the night holds the last of the warmth Burrows of her brow lives likely to unfold And her heart leaves with it dire and soft The night holds mysteries from her heart Unsettling the evening brings with it cold Where she buries her feelings to impart Burrows of her brow lives likely to unfold She freezes where men bring her flowers The night holds mysteries from her heart The time is elongated by the night towers Where she buries her feelings to impart No other person can understand her eyes She freezes where men bring her flowers It’s one of a many distinguished disguise The time is elongated by the night towers She forces herself to embellish the night No other person can understand her eyes Softly she extinguishes nearly gone sight It’s one of a many distinguished disguise As the night holds the last of the warmth She forces herself to embellish the night And her heart leaves with it dire and soft Softly she extinguishes nearly gone sight Russell Sivey Anyone know if this is a form? It's not a true Pantoum! A reverse Pantoum maybe? ABA’B’…CAC’A’…DCD’C’…XDX’D’…BXB’X’

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Date: 9/8/2017 10:14:00 AM
It is beautiful and mysterious. I love it because it is a Sivey!
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Date: 9/8/2017 7:34:00 AM
WOW! Lovely poem no matter what form it is--so delicate and touching, Russell!
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/8/2017 10:13:00 AM
Date: 9/8/2017 6:54:00 AM
Hi Russell, no its not a true Pantoum although quite wonderful, perhaps a Sivey Pantoum, I LOVE it. Thanks for visiting my poem this morning, and spotting those typos, like the woman in your poem my sight is nearly gone too, I fixed them now thank you. Hope you are doing well and recovering.
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Date: 9/8/2017 4:26:00 AM
- All I know ... that's a beautiful poem, Russell - I wish you and Emma a wonderful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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