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Unraveled Mind Premiere Contest Winner

The stitches begin to unravel The seams are tearing apart Arteries bursting within a heart Through insanity the mind travels Unable to grasp the sincerity Through a kaleidoscope of fears Drowning within rivers of tears Thoughts no longer have clarity Living like a garden vegetable Dreaming of being an intellectual 12/29/2017 Written for contest: (5 words, 10 lines Rhyme) Placed 1st in Contest Results

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Date: 1/3/2018 3:45:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Brian.
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Brian Davey
Date: 1/6/2018 4:45:00 AM
Thank you very much
Date: 12/31/2017 11:06:00 PM
Congratulations, Brian on your fine win. Happy New Year.
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Brian Davey
Date: 1/3/2018 7:33:00 PM
Many Thanks
Date: 12/31/2017 9:44:00 PM
Excellent, Brian! Congrats and happy New Year! Janice
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Brian Davey
Date: 1/3/2018 7:32:00 PM
Thank you Janice
Date: 12/31/2017 8:44:00 PM
Wow, Brian! What a great write and congrats on your win and Happy New Year. Here's hoping 2018 will be better than 2017. Cheers!
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Brian Davey
Date: 1/1/2018 8:41:00 AM
Thank you and we all hope 2018 will be better!
Date: 12/31/2017 8:37:00 PM
A brilliant write Brian. Deep with great imagery. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win.. Happy New Year! ~Susan
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Brian Davey
Date: 1/1/2018 8:40:00 AM
Thank you Susan I am glad you enjoyed it
Date: 12/31/2017 8:32:00 PM
Congrats on your top win, Brian! Nicely done!
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Brian Davey
Date: 12/31/2017 11:33:00 PM
Thank you Kim
Date: 12/31/2017 8:20:00 PM
wow Brian, I am shocked you have no comments yet! This was amazing. Loved the flow, rhythm and rhyme scheme. Well deserved first place, thank you and congrats :) -luloo
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Brian Davey
Date: 12/31/2017 11:32:00 PM
Thank you again Lauren for another great contest and I am ecstatic about my Placement!

Book: Shattered Sighs