Unlucky In Love

Unforgiven but still in love Out of control I caused you harm I slipped fell down bruised and then I saw God but he pushed me back only to help me up When the fog cleared I looked back to see the damage done All the doors began to shut I knocked and no one answered No one believed that I had changed But the past was too soon my heart deflated like a pierced balloon unforgiven but still in love You tell me it’s alright forgotten but nothing changes A friendly handshake a tense hug carefully chosen pauses But I am still waiting to change in a heartbeat when you call my name like you did before a shelter from my storm Frank (Black) Blacharczyk

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Annie Lander

Date: 11/14/2022 1:59:00 PM

profound keep up the good work

Timothy Ray

Date: 11/13/2022 8:14:00 PM

quite the exercise in coming to the truth within...accurate in so many details and...unfortunately captures a small distant path of my own....a mistake i never repeated and decades later i still always remember her birthday, gone are flowers and candy....now it is Burt Bees purse size hand creams...learned, forget, forgive, and move on...Let go and Let God

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 6/1/2017 12:34:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem, remember always try to change yourself before the damage has been done becuase after the damage if you do change it wouldn t be of much use however I m new on this site and would really appreciate if you could find time to read my poems and give your honest reviews about them

James Inman

Date: 8/23/2015 9:20:00 PM

Emotional and well written.

Edlynn Nau

Date: 8/14/2015 7:53:00 PM

I have to ask...what storm? If love is seen as a ”storm" it is not love but a one-sided event! Go away from that! REAL love is defiantly two-sided!

Constance La France

Date: 6/15/2015 7:59:00 AM

Frank, you have penned a wonderful free verse, full of deep emotion, well done and welcome to poetry soup

Constance La France
Date: 6/16/2015 7:36:00 AM

Songs often inspire me also to write

Frank Black Blacharczyk
Date: 6/15/2015 3:13:00 PM

There is a beautiful song written and sung by Tim Hardin called Unforgiven. I could certainly identify with it and it inspired me to write this. Thanks for the comment.