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Unlike Thee Athenian

Those rarer men I once fondly knew... Many dead now... What remains of them they are so Few. Am I to die when numbered Amongst the last? Old and bent, pale and withered; Thin fingers grasped Like a hawks talons upon the Smooth knob of a lacquered stick; My few remaining hairs, as grey As Novembers morn, oiled and Combed sideways over...well... Whatever small amount will be left Of it! Surely that cannot be What advancing age holds for one Such as me? Then a portly figure stuffed like A drawn-up sack; Crouched forward and painfully Shuffling; stooped, like encumbered Atlas, with the weight of woeful Lamentations heaped across my Crooked back. Never! For, and knowing no man, with Any amount of certainty, may choose His end, On my steadfast will would'st rather To depend:- When refusing advancements Proffered from the Grim Reapers Gnawing malaise and begotten ills; Also, with all caution, avoiding That deceitful Twilight that so Beguilingly spills... Over lengthening shadows at close Of day; Thusly recalling there was, long Ago, an Athenian, who, to his Deficit, in a greatly foolish and Disastrous way, Practised un-natural munificence; His bane, Apemantus, the cynic, Whilst loudly admonishing his Charity, cruelly heaping upon him In all manner of rebuking offence! And, notwithstanding hesitant Modesty, let it hereby be duly Mentioned that I too, undoubtedly, Can somewhat compare against a Not inconsiderable measure of Intelligence and wit; In the mind's eye to construct Momentary abstractions, that, Loosely interconnected, the swift Instance might briefly fit; For do we not all strive to Produce the same? To induce the many shades of an Evasive nuance into the fleeting Semblance of an illuminated frame? Once a distinguished man wrote :- That whomsoever Toiled industriously at a couple of Lines...was to work harder than all Those involved with much Laboured effort and hard physical Endeavour. Resolved, therefore, in this Moment of fortitude, ex post facto, A part of myself to newly Re-invent... Before the lessening years are Solely wasted upon the countless Alters of good intent. It is done! Let this then be my Stated pledge: that I shall call On all dead poets for their Creative rage - To help fashion rhyming ink onto A blank and crisp white page! Although I have neither Lofty Blake's Hammered anvil nor the fantastic Clay of common Yeats; No matter - I have enough! Unto their evasive Muse I Therefore propose, before my fuel Runs dry, To aspire to reinvigorate...as if An ailing comet whose roaring Clamour, ferociously reignited, Burning a trail through the frozen Fields of an ice filled sky! And, long hence the pen drops From this aged and palsied hand, Under the blazing winds of those Sapphire fields - raising high my Standard! A tattered rag, amidst A salient, in the heart of this Desolated and near abandoned Wasteland. Until, shattered, like countless Shards of a broken comet, That discarded verse Lies with my mouldering bones... Wrapped in the comforting Blanket of the tight brown earth.

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Date: 6/20/2018 10:20:00 AM
You my friend are truly a poet's poet! I stand in awe of this magnificent creation. This is top class artistry and a true pleasure to read! A fav, a gleaming jewel that stirs my old soul!!
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John Fleming
Date: 6/24/2018 3:52:00 PM
Robert, I do not think I have ever received a much more generous set of comments on the "Soup", regarding one of my poems, as these of yours -- many thanks old friend!! You will always be most welcome here! My very best wishes...as ever of course. :) john
Date: 1/19/2018 7:38:00 PM
Hints of Coleridge, to me anyway, you're mind is amazing, or you're chanelling. Love this...."Like a hawks talons upon the Smooth knob of a lacquered stick". I love the last two paras ... bugger it the whole poem's brilliant. Love it.
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John Fleming
Date: 1/21/2018 4:26:00 AM
Love your comments as well, Leanne! :) Trust me when I say you are always going to be most welcome here. My very best regards. :) john
Date: 1/8/2018 5:50:00 PM
Revisiting your classic beauty here. Sure wish you would write more poems!! Do you ever consider doing the challenges here that require forms with line limits? I would love to see you do, for example, an etheree or triolet or tanka. Maybe you have some examples of those I never saw but I believe I have seen all your poetry by now. Thanks for your welcome response to my honeymoon etheree!
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John Fleming
Date: 1/10/2018 8:10:00 AM
Hi, Andre. Love your honest remarks...as always. Regarding poetry contests, no I am definitely not a "Poetry Contest" writer; time is the problem here -- I just do not have enough of it! However, as per usual, you are spot on regarding your comment about line length and line limits; I have decided to try and write some more "disciplined" poetry in the very near future. My very warmest regards, Andrea! :) john
Date: 1/2/2018 7:06:00 AM
I totally agree with Andrea. Indeed a classic style that no one can imitate. Quite a nostalgic write, John. My best regards, Dear Friend.
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John Fleming
Date: 1/8/2018 3:24:00 AM
Thank you, Afzal! And thank you for your generous words...you have always been so very kind with your nice comments - much appreciated! My very warmest regards as always, Afzal! Your friend. :) john
Date: 11/12/2017 8:32:00 PM
wow, the ending of this was so amazing, John. Your style is so classic to me. Always elegant!
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John Fleming
Date: 12/25/2017 1:59:00 AM
Andrea, your kind comments are always so welcomed by me - Thank you! Please accept my apologies for the late reply...I work as a postie -- and I am completely exhausted!! Allow me to offer you my very best seasonal greetings...may you have a wonderfully content and merry Christmas! Your friend. :) john
Date: 10/26/2017 3:06:00 AM
Hi John, there are parts of this poem that's me, and there are parts that are way beyond me. It is definitely you..
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/29/2017 12:31:00 PM
No apology is necessary.... you write beautifully. I bet you are an English professor. You use the words not like anybody else. Thanks again... Pashang
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John Fleming
Date: 10/29/2017 6:09:00 AM
Hello, Pashang, my good friend. Please accept my apologies for my late reply...I have been very busy of late. I really did enjoy reading this comment you left me, Pashang...I regard it as a great compliment - thank you! I will be paying you a visit very soon...till then -- my very warmest regards as always! :) john
Date: 10/19/2017 9:36:00 AM
Mate I've been having trouble with the pen now for a few months, most of this year in fact. With other things crowding my mind and all that jazz. But John I've got to tell you that this piece of poetry is a gem, a joy, and I think has shown me the light. Thanks mate, a real pumping handshake, thanks.
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John Fleming
Date: 10/21/2017 5:54:00 AM
Scott, always great to hear from yourself -- you are definitely among my most favorite commentators! I am very pleased to think this poem of mine may have been instrumental in any small way in helping you rekindle your poetic fervor...and here's to your pen, Scott - cheers! My very warmest regards my friend. :) john
Date: 10/12/2017 5:31:00 PM
When you attain this great success your poems will not be mouldering with your bones in the earth but the comets tail burning brilliantly across the ages to the ends of the universe. I believe poetry never stays still long enough to moulder.
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John Fleming
Date: 10/13/2017 8:20:00 PM
Thank you, Patricia! Always nice to see you putting in an appearance here on my page...I intend to catch up with your latest poems over the weekend. Till then - cheers! :) John
Date: 10/10/2017 2:09:00 PM
George, I have to say that you are fast becoming my most favourite commentator...no one person ever has given me more encouragement -- my most sincere gratitude and thanks! I have, as always, re-edited...let me know what you think? My very warmest regards, George! :) john P.s Each verse has three sets of Heroic Couplets...not totally convinced of its overall appeal...but - there again? :)
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