Umbrella

Under a nylon dome upside, raindrops patter upon my small enclave unusual patterns unique, sliding over ubiquitous water upends the stormy skies. A Pleiades Poem 10/1/2022

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Hat Bueckert

Date: 3/20/2023 8:26:00 PM

Reading some of your alphabet Pleiades, a fun series you did, this one really stood out to me. Great wording :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/20/2023 9:36:00 PM

Thank you, Hat! I enjoyed working with the Pleiades form. Glad you liked this one! :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/3/2022 11:49:00 AM

Unusual patterns sliding over ubiquitous water…love the wording in your verse. It was interesting!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/3/2022 11:56:00 AM

Thank you, Kim! I’m glad you liked this one! :)

njv Tomcatx

Date: 10/1/2022 10:26:00 AM

Well-done. Very good writing & I like the structure/formatting (sort of a shape poem).

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2022 11:00:00 AM

Thank you, Nj! I appreciate your kind comment. Glad you enjoyed this! :)