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Traces of Sunlight

As I try to break through my dark cocoon, you outline memories I stir within of salty skin held in the warm breath of June, glazed gold by a luminous sky and ocean. You outline memories I stir within like sunlight tracing a wintry scape. Glazed gold by a luminous sky and ocean, I roil on your shore’s ever changing shape. Like sunlight tracing a wintry scape, mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear. I roil on your shore’s ever changing shape awakened by feelings of having you near. Mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear when I cling to echoes of your distant voice. Awakened by feelings of having you near, the morning fog rises and songbirds rejoice. When I cling to echoes of your distant voice, of salty skin held in the warm breath of June, the morning fog rises and songbirds rejoice as I try to break through my dark cocoon. Written for: A Rhyming Pantoum of Five Stanzas Contest Date: 5/9/22 Sponsor: L. Milton Hankins

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Date: 6/7/2022 9:11:00 AM
Rhonda, congratulations on your win! Wonderful use of metaphor - the clearing mist of morning at the ocean - to articulate your reach for sunshine and new hope borning within you. Wonderfully written. Sending you blessings.
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Date: 6/6/2022 7:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest. "Mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear"~love the depth of your words. :)Paulette
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Date: 6/4/2022 12:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Your "Traces of Sunlight" is a Wonderful write. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away.....................
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Date: 6/4/2022 8:04:00 AM
A very fine write, Rhonda. It is so deserving of notice in my Pantoum contest. I enjoyed it immensely. Congratulations on your placement!
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Date: 5/17/2022 3:39:00 PM
It feels as though this is coming from a dark place, but with glimmers of hope as sunshine breaks through the fog and clouds, and summer memories are kindled as winter yields to springtime renewal. I just love the lines "Mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear when I cling to echoes of your distant voice" and the imagery of songbirds rejoicing and fog lifting. Gorgeous and profound ~ John
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 5/19/2022 7:35:00 PM
Thank you, John. Yes, I am trying to keep the darkness at bay. Writing about it has helped. Rhonda xx
Date: 5/15/2022 7:50:00 AM
A fine piece Rhonda, really good imagery with you speaking from a dark place and trusting the sunlight is getting brighter for you. Blessings always, Gordon
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 5/15/2022 10:55:00 AM
Thank you, Gordon, for your kindness. Yes, this is a brighter day. I have good ones and bad ones, but I'm keeping my eyes looking up. Rhonda xx

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