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To the West

I miss those thrilling butterflies flapping wings against my chest, but they've joined my setting heart on its journey to the west. For Susan's single rhyming couplet contest

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Skat A

Date: 6/15/2013 5:35:00 PM

super poem super win. *love ~SKAT

Joseph May

Date: 6/14/2013 7:33:00 AM

this one is delightful...congrats on your win..

Audrey Haick

Date: 6/13/2013 8:11:00 PM

: ) Congratulations, Heather! This is lovely!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/13/2013 7:40:00 PM

Well done Heather, I enjoyed your couplet.

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 6/13/2013 4:58:00 PM

Heather congratulations on your win. A lovely couplet. Warm Smiles, Connie

Tim Ryerson

Date: 6/13/2013 4:53:00 PM

Wow Heather...I see several interpretations here...Perfect meter and rhythm in this gem of a couplet...Congratulations! - Tim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/13/2013 4:04:00 PM

Heather it is good to see you on the winners' list. Yes, I sure remember this one! Congratulations.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/13/2013 4:01:00 PM

Very clever write. And meaningful. congrats. BG

Kirin Lawrence

Date: 6/13/2013 1:31:00 AM

This was succinct and divine.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/11/2013 6:10:00 PM

superb I love it gl Shadow x

Painted Hunter

Date: 6/10/2013 6:20:00 AM

I agree with Andrea. It's one of the best I've seen. Nicely done!

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 6/8/2013 6:39:00 PM

Oh, yes! I see the different meanings too. How charming! Very picturesque too I must say.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/7/2013 2:39:00 PM

I think this one is so symbolic but it can have different meanings. Or not! Let me know how you meant it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/7/2013 2:39:00 PM

btw, one of the prettiest couplets I have seen in this contest.

Poet Tacito

Date: 6/7/2013 10:41:00 AM

Beautiful! Being from the East Coast (Jersey) and moving to Northern Cali just over a year ago, I can certainly say the journey was/still is quite thrilling.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/7/2013 9:21:00 AM

Lovely!