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Tin Man

I am a tin man; corrosion ravaged, tin man. Staring placidly o’er countless hills marred by desolation rills; unfeeling, here I fade. Black oil hemorrhages and I fade. Tic-tock heart song Tic…tic…tic... tock. Set aside the oil can, oil cannot save a man so consumed by jealousy. What yet is there left of me? On my lips a frozen grin hides the rage I feel within. As a comfort you caress but I am strong, so I suppress the feeling…no more feeling. As I fade. In this final dusk under sunset skies of rust through the smothering of depression I can’t numb this last obsession: How did you so long disguise all the truth behind your eyes? Why, for years on end as we danced, did you pretend that this perfect masquerade would never fade? Oily tears, on metal cheeks, I can’t seal up all the leaks. My blood drains out onto the ground, I stare and grin at the haunting sound of dripping oil as it fills countless desolation rills; and unfeeling, here I fade. Black oil hemorrhages, and I fade. Tic…please tock do not reply; just let me die. 08/20/15

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Date: 8/26/2016 8:22:00 AM
A 7+ for this heart-wrenching WINNING poem. Tin man--the perfect choice of "vehicle" for conveying the theme. Janice
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Date: 8/26/2016 6:26:00 AM
Surreal yet emotional.... Congrats for your WIN with this wonderful piece!! ;-)
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Date: 8/22/2015 3:19:00 PM
Ahhh . . . Been there . . . There is nothing like the pain of losing someone you loved. I have finally decided that the word "love" causes more heartache and stress than any other thing in the world.
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Date: 8/22/2015 3:43:00 PM
...and yet we're told it's better to have loved and lost...which might be true, but sometimes seems doubtful when we're in the thick of the loss.
Date: 8/22/2015 12:49:00 AM
A wonderful poem! Well done for giving it so many imaginative qualities. A happy 7 from me. Julia
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Date: 8/22/2015 3:41:00 PM
Hey Julia, I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it. =)
Date: 8/21/2015 7:22:00 PM
Graham, this is an amazing write, I really like the dark feel and you have penned some great phrases, A7 and thanks for visiting my tree poem
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The Grahamburglar
Date: 8/21/2015 7:36:00 PM
Thanks for stopping by to read and taking the time to comment. =)

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