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Thunderstorm Rages

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Crooked lightning fingers flash off and on Ominous clouds gather from dusk to dark Everything he accused her of is wrong Each command and order sounds like a bark Rumbling thunder moves closer to its mark From out of nowhere his fist hit her nose Dime-size hail pelted the ground fast and stark The storm covers up screams of other blows This torrential downpour eventually slows July 1, 2018 Summer Rain Storm Contest by Dale Gregory Cozart N/A July 26, 2018 - A Poem NA'd in a July Contest by Dear Heart a.k.a. Broken Wings Second Place

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Constance La France

Date: 7/29/2018 5:18:00 PM

Susan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this deep and dark but wonderfully penned poem, well done !

Susan Gentry
Date: 8/7/2018 4:25:00 AM

Thank you so much! I am honored to be on your list of winners. Thanks for sponsoring and for all you do. :)

Haley Fisher

Date: 7/28/2018 9:37:00 AM

Congrats Susan. Very dark, so well expressed.

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/28/2018 1:59:00 PM

Thank you, Haley.

Eve Roper

Date: 7/27/2018 5:18:00 PM

Congratulations on your awesome win, Susan. I enjoyed reading this well written poem with great imagery. Hugs Eve

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/28/2018 12:09:00 AM

Thanks, Eve.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 7/10/2018 3:04:00 PM

So dark and striking in its bluntness, this really grabbed me-

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/10/2018 8:39:00 PM

Thanks, Michelle.

Roy Pett

Date: 7/4/2018 10:20:00 AM

Excellent poem and a cleverly written one, good luck in contest. :))

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/4/2018 8:01:00 PM

Thank you, Roy!

Paul Callus

Date: 7/3/2018 2:43:00 AM

The pain of physical and emotional abuse ... such 'storms' might pass by, but their effect is a lasting one. Metaphorically impressive and expressive! Regards // paul

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/4/2018 8:00:00 PM

Oh yes, you are so right. Thanks, Paul!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/2/2018 7:23:00 PM

Clever? Original? Powerful? Blending of nature and humanity? --- Check, check, check, check: All of the above. Nice poem, Susan! :) gw

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/4/2018 7:59:00 PM

Awww thank you! :

Agnes Krampe

Date: 7/2/2018 7:00:00 PM

Powerful poem, Susan, great juxtaposition.

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/4/2018 12:17:00 AM

Thank you!

Rob Carmack

Date: 7/1/2018 11:19:00 PM

My favorite line: "The storm covers up screams of other blows". Good luck in the contest Susan.

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/2/2018 1:09:00 AM

Thanks, rob! Appreciate you reading and commenting. :)

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 7/1/2018 8:52:00 PM

In this brief verse, with the juxtaposition of harsh, brutal images, you have created a stark scene that strikes the heart and causes emotional and aesthetic frisson. Well done, Susan

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/2/2018 1:08:00 AM

Thank you! What a wonderful comment. :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/1/2018 5:47:00 PM

Amazing where you took this theme, Susan...such a powerful metaphor combining the two storms. Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/1/2018 6:00:00 PM

Thanks, Sandra! Appreciate your input. :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/1/2018 2:11:00 PM

WOW, susan, very clever and original thinking for this one. BRAVO!!

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/1/2018 6:00:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea! Appreciate you. :)

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/1/2018 12:18:00 PM

Your muse went to a very dark place here Susan. I dare say, thunder can also cover up a shotgun blast. The old codger gotta sleep sometime. I do wish it would rain though! Good luck, sweetie:)

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/1/2018 5:59:00 PM

Oh yes. And should have... We may need to do you a rain dance!! Thank you, :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/1/2018 10:47:00 AM

Powerful message of a bully Susan, who have no place in our societies. Tom. Greetings from Turkey.

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/1/2018 5:56:00 PM

Nope but they are there. Turkey? Vacation? Sounds exciting! :)

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/1/2018 10:40:00 AM

a sad poem, though I see you and I had the same thought with this, yours more violent than mine...good luck with the contest

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/1/2018 5:53:00 PM

Why thank you! Oh I like yours, more thought-provoking than in your face. Good luck to you too.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/1/2018 8:58:00 AM

what a sad sad interpretation of the theme Susan, I can almost feel his fists raining down on her after a stormy row:-( hugs jan xx - the captcha is CAD lol!!!

Susan Gentry
Date: 7/1/2018 5:51:00 PM

Lol... it's funny how those fit... uncanny really :)