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Through Paned Glass

Breezing trees heard the whispers of leaves in the fardel of branches as they trembled beneath the relentless breath of april's storm i watched them from my window this paned glass smudged over with the splatter of lashing rain pulsating against my hands as i struggled to see clearly through the ambages of drops gliding down in an oblique trail as they fell from ashen skies and sullen eyes the same this window has become my passage to the forbidden outside world where society once traipsed freely upon these cobblestone streets yet all i hear are the echoes of rain as it plummets downward all i see are these trees struggling to remain grounded in the lash of storm's fury forthwith i see you, me, a society clinging together likes these leaves in the midst of this storm trying to break free april 24, 2020 * Breezing trees heard the whispers of leaves* line credit to Vijay Pandit Poetic lines Contest Sponsored by Silent One

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Date: 5/3/2020 8:21:00 PM
Lovely! The last verse says much! Congratulations on first place, Sandra!
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Date: 5/3/2020 11:03:00 AM
Back with a big congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 5/3/2020 6:00:00 AM
I can feel the angst and sadness in this poem, i like how you compared your situation to leaves outside... it is relevant to lockdown at the moment, but also reflects a person who could have social anxiety... brilliant from your pen.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Date: 4/26/2020 10:36:00 AM
So good Sandy, great to see your muse is on the loose again! Hey heard from Chris G I've not heard from him, is he gone again?
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Sandra Adams
Date: 4/26/2020 9:02:00 PM
Thank you so much John...I really had to coax her to write this one...I saw your contest and am hoping she feels like writing a rhyme... He hasn't written in awhile but I don't think he's gone totally... he comments here and there... hugs
Date: 4/25/2020 6:48:00 AM
An masterfully constructed poem with a plethora of impressive imagery and multiple messages dearest, Sandra Great work. Good luck my friend. Hugs xxx
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Date: 4/26/2020 9:00:00 PM
Thank you so much Demetrios for such a wonderful comment... hugs XoXo
Date: 4/25/2020 12:36:00 AM
Great imagery, of the now ,and the sounds of emotion. Sandra, a society of shaking leaves. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
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Sandra Adams
Date: 4/26/2020 8:57:00 PM
Thank you so much Eve... one can only hope the wind's soon end and the shaking subsides... hugs and blessings
Date: 4/25/2020 12:32:00 AM
Windows and rain are two powerful metaphors you use to good effect, Sandra. Love your vocab, and your portrayal of the sadness at pondering "the forbidden world outside". Your poem speaks for many of us enduring the storm. Good to see you again. Hugs ~ John
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Sandra Adams
Date: 4/26/2020 8:56:00 PM
Thank you so much John...we have had our share of rain for sure... love using nature as metaphors... my mind has been lost among the storm....my muse was hiding and even reading was difficult it was like I was reading and not comprehending things.... hugs and blessings
Date: 4/24/2020 10:48:00 PM
Hello Sandra, I like this poem. It goes well with Three Dog Night's 'Just an old fashioned love song...,Playing on the radio.,..... And wrapped around the music is the sound Of someone promising they'll never go'. I hope your week-end is good. -Richard
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Sandra Adams
Date: 4/26/2020 8:54:00 PM
Thank you so much Richard... sorry for the late reply..my mind's been off in the depths somewhere, reading and writing were not coming easily... seems to be coming back a little now, maybe because I tuned the news out now... your reply brought a smile … hugs
Date: 4/24/2020 3:58:00 PM
Superb imagery from start to finish--and a poem filled with emotions touched by poignant hues of forbidden outside world. Excellent, as always, and worthy of a TOP win, Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 4/24/2020 4:03:00 PM
Thank you my friend, your kind words are always an appreciated smile... your line inspired my muse, so thanks for that she has been fickle these days! I am glad you liked the poem that came from your words.... Hugs :)

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