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Theatre of My Soul

The flying sent projections free to see, from adjunct Astrals singing bold decree. Perched on Pisces’s cusp, forsaking Plato’s cave, Puppets casting shadows, chancing me a slave. They hang from dreams of higher forms, allures Contempt in self when loving carnal cores. Haunted by women’s passions kept in Spirits, Dawns my sleeping stages now inherits Marionettes aloft eternal twists of spinning truths with lies recalling trysts. Killing prone volitions, changing essence. Chosen starlight’s beings guiding presence. Upon a love in purest form demands, Forgotten suicides of ego strands. Risking Pirsig’s fate in Zen and journey, Waging sanity, a bounty worthy. The stringing of my soul and bracing seeks, A pulling truth beyond this death it speaks. ------------------------------------------------------------ Alternating stanzas of iambic and trochaic pentameter

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Balveen Cheema

Date: 11/14/2015 11:55:00 AM

Exceptionally philosophic- with many allusions! You gradually move from the astrological role on your cusp sign to marionettes dancing to the tune of the puppeteer, slowly progressing to The Republic and finally the Zen approach as penned by Pirsig! Hat off to your couplet! Unbelievably intelligent! Rob,I rate you at 100! Balveen

Ralph Sergi

Date: 11/11/2015 7:36:00 AM

Hi Rob: A difficult form done very well. My compliments!

Umar Kakamu Aliyu

Date: 11/10/2015 4:54:00 PM

Very well captivating piece. It move slowly and pure.

Sarita Milliner

Date: 11/10/2015 3:22:00 PM

Captivating!!!

Debbie Duncan

Date: 10/31/2015 10:19:00 PM

I love this :) love the metaphors, I've used them myself in a few of my writes. Hammer in Hand is one. I see your couplet was featured as well :)

Gary Bateman

Date: 10/28/2015 5:46:00 AM

Hello Rob, I just saw your featured couplet, Theatre of my Soul," on Poetry Soup today. This is a marvelous rhymed couplet that is quite exquisitely written. And I really like your technique of alternating iambic and trochaic pentameter. The imagery and metaphors blend perfectly, and the tone and tenor of the verses are at a perfect pitch and heighten the aura of enchantment, darkness, and mystery. (I've done my own share metered work, and appreciate your work here!!) A "7" + FAV!! Cheers, Gary

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/27/2015 5:45:00 PM

I did so enjoyed reading your work this evening. It has been awhile since i have sit long enough to read and enjoy a good work such a yours. Thank you for posting it. Carol

Julia Ward

Date: 10/25/2015 1:33:00 AM

An enjoyable write, Rob.

Skat A

Date: 8/16/2015 12:51:00 AM

Hi Rob, Congratulations on having your poem featured on the soup's home page :). **SKAT**

Paul Schneiter

Date: 4/29/2015 7:52:00 AM

Rob, this poem is deeply thought-provoking and refreshingly—even stunningly—original. I think it's a remarkable composition, one I wish I had the knowledge and talent to write. Thank you for sharing it.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/10/2015 10:08:00 PM

I see Armand loved this one too!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/10/2015 10:07:00 PM

Visiting this one you said is one of your personal best. Now I remember how well you also do with meter, Rob!! You can go BOTH ways, metered OR free!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/9/2015 4:17:00 PM

Rob, Congratulations, on your win. Stop by my latest blog "BEGINNINGS" if you'd like. Hope you are having a Wonderful Day, thank you for supporting my contest -Always & Forever- LINDA

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/2/2015 8:26:00 PM

looks like another contest you and I did not score with!! but it was a beautiful entry nonetheless. I see you too love playing with meter. Keep it up!! I adored the final couplet of this poem!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/31/2014 9:45:00 PM

beautiful our souls are all special and what we go through makes us strong, enjoyed this one,... p.d.

Rob Carmack

Date: 12/25/2014 8:35:00 AM

Thanks Maurice for you compliment. Yes, this is for the Puppet contest. I think your poems are of this magnitude (assuming we are both capable of magnitude :) ), it is just in a different style. I think this is where people can get stuck, in considering one style or especially form, superior to another. We have seen it here at PS, with meter especially. Merry Christmas and thank you again.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/25/2014 6:52:00 AM

WOW! I assume this is for the puppet challenge. I could live another one hundred years and I still would not be able to write a poem of this magnitude. This is being added to my favs without question. I loved reading this gem, Thank you!