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The View From a Window

A view of the ragged woodland from The window:- Slender branched trees that shed From high above to low below; The faint, mauven peaks Smattered with barely visible Scatterings of drifted snow; Across the matted undergrowth A bronzed carpet of copper coloured Leaves Whose rusting hue, Momentarily ignited by stray Sunbeams weakly smouldering, Briefly refurbished - Deceives with all the colours of a Rainbow... From vibrant red through to shy Hints of indigo; Those vague outlines indicating Receding hills; Here, arising, long ago, every waking Dawning, The creaking structures Of groaning and imposing mills; Soon a slow thawing that quickly Spills Into the trickling replenishments Of many gushing and silvery little Rills. Enchantment gripped me! And I found myself wistfully Thinking... Maybe, perhaps, maybe, somewhere, Just behind where the great Flattening Orb Is now rapidly shrinking, That I might, by perchance, find, If I did so hope to bravely dare, To happen upon a hidden and Sedentary way of life up there? That, forgotten, has turned its Back on the social conflicts Plagued by the curses of ingrained Vice; Encumbering a soul with its petty Squabblings, Imposing upon with demands and Avarice... When placing unnecessary burdens On a honest bodies daily call Of grinding toil and wearisome Strife! And still stood, With hands outstretched upon the Painted sill, At the waist half-bent, Now troubled by quiet mutterings In an inexplicable sorts Of self-imposed discontent, My staid consciousness almost Unawares, As, momentarily distracted, I hesitated, and, unseeing, Inattentively stared... Until... A ragged chapter of cawing Daws, Loudly jabbering overhead, Suddenly wheeled - And upwardly soared! Whereupon, in murderous haste, Awkwardly fled When laboriously stealing away Back inside the stubbled fields... Thus causing me to slowly straighten; Whilst, with a singular heartfelt pang, Liken a moorland mist slowly rolling Over That indivisibly conceals... Drew shut the sullen curtains, which, Heavily embroidered with indeterminate finality, Dejectedly hang... Each draped aside of the cold Reveals.

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Date: 10/3/2019 3:47:00 PM
John I really do love this poem! And always come back to it! How nice it would be to see that view!;( a girl can dream maybe one day some one will venture on travels to a nice Iowa cabin!;)
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Date: 10/22/2019 10:48:00 AM
Hmmmm, indeed, a nice Iowa cabin? Yes...that does sound all rather lovely, Poetess. Lots of warmest thoughts for you this coming night. :) john
Date: 8/11/2018 5:43:00 AM
John, this went through me. I thought it was taking me in one direction and then you take the reader deeper into an even sadder, heavier place. I love this. It's excellent!
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Date: 7/13/2018 11:34:00 PM
For me, this wonderful piece is brimming with so many directions and personal interpretations. I felt the sort of heavy, brooding weight I feel under the dead of winter, in the first part if this piece. Then I sensed the character (Perhaps you) wondered about the serenity and undiscovered places out there?? At the end perhaps being pulled back away from those thoughts when the birds came; drawing the curtains on the thoughts themselves.? It was a great, THOUGHT provoking poem !
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Date: 2/23/2018 10:50:00 AM
With your amazing talent, you have the awesome gift of pulling the reader into the scene you have painted.You captivated from the very beginning of this piece and held me captive to the very end with your incredible imagery and with every stroke of your magical pen! What an incredible piece - a fave for sure! Love and hugs. Pandita
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Date: 6/17/2018 2:05:00 PM
Hello, Pandita. Allow me to apologize for the lateness of the reply...I have been rather remiss with my Soup obligations of late; only just now catching up. Thank you for your lovely remarks...as always you are most generous. Your grateful friend. :) john
Date: 12/20/2017 5:05:00 AM
Thanks for this reflective write.
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Date: 12/31/2017 3:24:00 PM
Hello, Jack. Apologies for the late reply; being a "Postie" at this time of year offers very little respite - totally exhausted! All my very best...and - pleased to meet you!! :) john
Date: 11/10/2017 4:23:00 PM
Lovely...thank you for your comment.
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Date: 12/31/2017 3:26:00 PM
Hello, Mari. Sorry for not answering earlier...in all honesty I did not notice your comment until quite recently - my sincere apologies! My very best regards - and thank you!! :) john
Date: 10/9/2017 8:52:00 AM
A breathtakingly beautiful view from a window John, so exquisitely depicted. Masterfully and beautifully expressed with imagery, rhythm and rhyme. Smooth as silk and a joy to read this morning!
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Date: 10/18/2017 9:32:00 AM
Thank you, Susan...and thank you for taking the time to visit -- it is very much appreciated! Please be assured that you will always be most warmly welcomed here by me at anytime. My very best regards! :) john
Date: 9/15/2017 10:01:00 AM
Wow, thank you for your comment on "Winds Return" your writing style is enviable. I'll be able to write like that, in about 143 years, or so.
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Date: 9/15/2017 2:15:00 PM
Hi, Terry. Nice to see you again -- rest assured you are always most welcome here! Thanks for your kind and generous comments; I have two dialects: my fathers brusque "Warringtonian" and my mothers more elegant, rustic, deepest Cheshire! My very best regards, Terry - Cheers! :) john
Date: 9/12/2017 2:55:00 PM
I wrote "Fall into Winter" and this reminds me of capturing nature from a Fall day that warns of Winter's coming Mine subtly reminds us that our lives are but a season. Yours graphically underscores this with a far better job than I did. There is great framed beauty here and a foggy sadness that gets a glimpse from the rolling moors all tucked in a casement window. I had to read it twice to get the different levels of season, landscape and psychic landscape. This was a satisfying read!
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Date: 9/15/2017 2:09:00 PM
Hello again, Edlynn. Love your comments! I will have a look at your poem "Fall into Winter"...sounds all rather charming. Till then -- all my very best! :) john
Date: 9/1/2017 12:24:00 PM
wow man .... you write like a girl ... ha ha ... we see riddle in leaves ... nice mind drifting bro ...
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Date: 9/4/2017 2:49:00 PM
I always enjoy your comments, Timothy...they certainly put a different slant on things; it is always good to realize how people interpret moments in different ways. Feel free to visit at anytime - much obliged! :) john
Date: 8/16/2017 9:15:00 PM
Wow John! You make me feel like a raw beginner with my silly Senryus and short poems. This is really impressive and the more so because long poems are usually not my cup of tea. But this one held me to the very end. Very descriptive in a very good way. Always easy to describe but not so easy to describe well. Your read #s are impressive. I rarely have reads beyond double digits on most of my poetry. Youre a cut above the rest.
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Date: 8/17/2017 7:32:00 AM
David, please allow me to thank you for your kind and gracious comments...I am most appreciative - Many thanks! Cheers! :) john P.s Nice to become acquainted, David! :)
Date: 8/14/2017 8:49:00 PM
Oh my I have just been on an odes thanks to your deft pen. I could almost see Heathcliff and Catherine ghostly treading over the heath. If this is your wish then I say follow your bliss. I did and have never regretted. Thank you for this ruggedly beautiful poem.
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Date: 8/15/2017 2:16:00 PM
Hi, Patricia. Nice to meet you...it is always good to make new friends. Please be assured that you are welcome here at anytime! Many thanks for visiting and leaving such nice comments...always appreciated! My very best regards! :) john
Date: 8/14/2017 12:55:00 PM
Well executed display of your appriciation and awareness of your surroundings here John, I thank you for your visit to prince's poem was he just a dog.? Yes and in that being he surpassed Expectation..' There is so much to be gained in being true to yourself he brought out..' keep well Joe.)
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Date: 8/15/2017 2:07:00 PM
Hi, Joe. Your verse about "Prince" was compelling stuff - Loved it!! Great to see you visiting again! Many thanks for leaving the comments, Joe...always very much appreciated by me. My warmest regards! :) john
Date: 6/26/2017 2:23:00 PM
Almost too sublime for me to render comment. Your senses are so adeptly intertwined, else could be written none so vast and wandering, yet honed with precision bordering on the divine. Thanks, John, for the gift of your words.
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Date: 7/3/2017 2:20:00 PM
Much obliged Mark...I am very pleased you enjoyed the poem. It was inspired by a radio show I was listening to about the life of Kenneth Grahame; in general the area around his home that inspired his fantastic book "The wind in the willows"...A truly remarkable book at that! The fourth line of my poem "From high above to low below" were words spoke by the presenter when describing the woodland the writer viewed from his window, this was the model for his "Wild Wood" in his great aforementioned work. Just goes to show that inspiration can manifest itself at any given instant. Many thanks, Mark...And my very wishes! :) john
Date: 5/19/2017 7:17:00 PM
great poem !
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Date: 5/20/2017 1:33:00 PM
Thank you, Ashley...That is very kind of you to say so - Much appreciated! My warmest regards. :) john P.s I will call around very soon for another look at your poetry.
Date: 5/11/2017 11:59:00 AM
What a fabulously inspiring window you have so wondrously described. Beautiful words.
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Date: 5/20/2017 1:30:00 PM
Hello, Scott. Sorry it has been such a long time in replying. I am truly exhausted at this moment with what is going on at my place of work...Damned night shift - Bl..dy awful!! Thanks as always for the visit and kind words...you will be more than welcome here at anytime. Much appreciated, Scott, and - Cheers! :) john
Date: 5/7/2017 4:13:00 PM
Beautiful view out your window breathtaking. ~*
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Date: 5/7/2017 5:34:00 PM
Eve, always nice to see you making an appearance here at my little corner of the great "Soup"; Hope everything is well with you at the moment and life is treating you kindly. Thank you for your charming comment - So very much appreciated! My warmest regards, Eve...And my very best wishes! :) john
Date: 5/7/2017 8:08:00 AM
An absolute beautiful view. Just fabulous, John. I love it :)
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Date: 5/7/2017 5:29:00 PM
Thank you, Akkina, you are most kind...And may I be permitted to say that it is a great pleasure to make your acquaintance. My best regards, Akkina - Cheers! :) john P.s Please feel free to visit at anytime...you can always be assured of a warm welcome here. :)
Date: 4/6/2017 7:38:00 PM
And what a lovely view it is, John, enchanting indeed... I enjoyed your poem very much... Beautifully written with such rich detail and imagery!
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Date: 4/7/2017 3:02:00 PM
Kelly - Great to hear from you once again...Always a pleasure I can assure you! I do hope you are keeping well... and life is treating you kindly. Please visit whenever you wish...You are always most welcome here at anytime. My very warmest regards, Kelly...And my best wishes as always. :) john
Date: 4/4/2017 1:28:00 AM
I liked your poem.
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Date: 4/7/2017 2:43:00 PM
Thank you, Keith...And thank you for taking the time to visit my little corner of the "Soup" and comment - Much appreciated! My best regards! :) john
Date: 3/26/2017 5:58:00 PM
Beautiful lines well-penned, John. I enjoyed reading the poem.
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Date: 3/28/2017 9:07:00 AM
Thank you, Adeniji...It is a great pleasure to become acquainted - My best regards! :) john
Date: 3/17/2017 6:04:00 AM
Hi John I seldom read such lengthly works but I must say yours is well worth the time and effort. And what a journey without leaving the room, truly masterful a ten on the scale of one to seven
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Date: 3/21/2017 2:58:00 PM
Jerry, may I say that I really enjoyed and appreciated your generous comments - Many thanks! My very best regards! :) john
Date: 3/16/2017 6:47:00 PM
Hi John, this is a totally excellent piece of poetry. I marvel at the living scene you lay before us John.This is a poem that if you read to quickly you miss a part of the canvas. This piece is one to be savoured slowly, even then, on each reading something new can be added to the piece. Youe pen does run gold John. This has to be a seven and a fave. Your Friend....Mike.
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Date: 3/21/2017 2:56:00 PM
Hi, Mike. So very good to see you putting in an appearance once again...I do so hope you are now feeling happier and refreshed; I am glad you are back! Thank you for all your lovely comments...They are always much appreciated by me! My very best regards...And my warmest wishes. :) john
Date: 3/2/2017 11:19:00 AM
Your ego must be bruised with all the praise heaped upon it...well get ready for some more. A thought provoking, gentle story, that picks up on the vast array of wonders that fill our every day world. A well constructed story that flows crisply with a pace set within the readers mind and heart. An inspiring glimpse at the wonders of life in both grandiose and minute observations. Your story flows with a pleasant beat and the words say everything by evoking thoughts within the reader's consciousness of familiarity because it is so easy to relate to the message of your story. Very well penned. Emile.
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Date: 3/21/2017 2:49:00 PM
Emile, I really cannot think of anyone on this site, or anywhere else for that matter, that has ever left me such in-depth comments regarding my poems - Thank you so very much! I really do enjoying your remarks....They are poetry within themselves! My very best regards, Emile. Your good friend. :) john
Date: 2/26/2017 2:06:00 AM
Hi John, I'm happy I found your beautiful poem tonight, a view that brings so much lovely imagery and raw emotion. I could read it again and again, finding a new treasure each time. This one goes to my faves...sending you a hug with hopes you're doing well. Rhonda :)
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Date: 2/27/2017 1:10:00 AM
Hello again, Rhonda! Thanks for the hug...I think I need one at the minute :) So very nice to see you visiting once again at my little corner of the Soup - You have been sorely missed! May I reciprocate in kind and say that I hope that you too are also happy and content and, hopefully, enjoying life to its full. Fantastic to hear from you again, Rhonda - Your kind comments are always very much appreciated! My very best wishes...And warmest regards! :) john
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