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The Sea in Us

We drag our ships over shapeless rock and sleep in color this night under lips of blue hemmed shut by the cold the gutting silence rising to devour - the sea in us Pulsing fifty-and-one spits in shades of red somewhere under there that visceral piston the hiss and pull of coral bending rage into the gaping jaw beautiful madness surrendered - in us the sea In essence more Spirit than Holy sweet agony unmistakable implicit design dissolving into bottomless mire violence trembles the surf after dark pulling death through fragrant memory - the sea in us And too quick this far we came only to part so soon to ruin into slender pools an edifice of stars our god love locked pin click cold and no moon for a key to release - in us the sea

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Date: 4/11/2024 9:52:00 AM
"pulling death through fragrant memory, the sea in us." Powerful line. Great piece.
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 4/11/2024 11:51:00 AM
thank you, Tonye, for the reply - my gratitude
Date: 3/28/2024 6:09:00 PM
"love locked pin click cold and no moon for a key to release" - wow, what a metaphor. The love so cold...
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 4/2/2024 7:37:00 PM
nice to hear from you paige - kindest regards
Date: 3/27/2024 8:38:00 PM
Hello Mat,I love how your poem dives deep into the tumultuous depths of human experience, likening our emotions to the relentless sea. The imagery of dragging ships over shapeless rock and sleeping under lips of blue paints a vivid picture of struggle and surrender. Your words evoke a sense of raw beauty and poignant reflection of the inherent connection between humanity and the vast expanse of the ocean. - Blessings, Daniel
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 3/28/2024 10:11:00 AM
Thank you, Daniel, for the thoughtful reply, kindest regards
Date: 3/27/2024 6:01:00 PM
creative and effective physical structure of your poem. I especially liked: "In essence more Spirit than Holy sweet agony unmistakable implicit design dissolving into bottomless mire" Your poem seems to have a spiritual nature too it...can't explain it, but I like it. Have a great evening, Sara
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 3/27/2024 7:27:00 PM
thank you sara - have a peaceful evening

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