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The Pick Up

i never knew her name. she was not very good at it, it seemed to me. her flirtations, too obvious. a desperation for union i could not understand. i love your eyes, she said with a come-hither smile. she leaned in close and brushed her hand against mine as though throwing a switch. yet i was drawn. by animal-emotional curiosity or by a lust to be exploited by her for her selfish pleasure i don’t know. we picked a nearby motel. i watched as she slowly undressed in the harsh light. in the dimly lit bar, i had craved seeing her body in its fullness, and now, with her delicate lines exposed in the florescent light -- it hardened me for her need. i itched to be her instrument to use without remorse as she saw fit. now, she asserted after preparation, i am ready.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/1/2015 2:31:00 PM
Hi Sam, You write with a matter of factness here - desire and lust being the theme. Your observations are purely physical and sexual with no emotional or intellectual intent. Your poem is highly erotically charged and your words transport me to a heightened amorous state! Sensory appeal is explosive: " it hardened me for her need." The woman seems lost, insecure and perhaps places more than she should on this encounter, where as you know exactly what you want! Brilliant! Guinivere5
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Date: 5/2/2014 3:00:00 AM
Howdy Sam. What a cool poem, only, what's it about lol. You met a girl and she what? Asserted herself; inserted yourself--I'm confused. Sounds like a bitchin date, though. Guess I'm hangin at the wrong bar :-) Mel
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Sam Toil
Date: 5/2/2014 6:51:00 AM
Sorry for the confusion. Its just about attitude and a little imagination;) Umm, I guess you had to have been there...lol. Thanks for stopping by. Peace...Sam
Date: 5/1/2014 7:23:00 PM
Sam wow oh wow.. I love this poem.. I love your imagery in each word.. I am saving this poem.. Brooke
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Sam Toil
Date: 5/2/2014 6:47:00 AM
Brook, I am so grateful that you "got" the imagery. It means so much to us as poets when we connect to one another. I am overwhelmed that you would choose to save it;) Peace...Sam