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The Odd Couple

There was a little girl that never quite seemed to fit in out of step with a world that seemed to her full of sin No matter what she did or tried there always was a gap that seemed to grow even when she sat on her dads lap Time passed by with little change except that she was alone every one else appeared to have a special some one One day the sun shone so brightly and flowers scented the land it seemed a day full of expectation while softly played the band Through the door stepped a man who also didn't quite fit in yet at the same time it was apparent he was without sin

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Date: 5/1/2024 4:38:00 PM
enjoyed the fluidity of your words, dear Shadow. I, too, was a girl who didn't ever truly fit it...both a blessing and a curse at time. The last two lines grabbed my heart! The man who stepped in her life (Jesus) didn't fit in. I remember that realization when I was in college & took solace in that understanding. Enjoyed your words; have a splendid evening, Sara (faving)
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Date: 5/1/2024 7:21:00 PM
Ty for faving this Sara its obvious you found your fit with Bill hugs Shadow
Date: 5/1/2024 12:34:00 PM
Very clever poem.. nice flow and rhymes to it..
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:07:00 PM
SO ty so much high praise from you I am pleased you liked it hugs Shadow
Date: 5/1/2024 9:56:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your beautiful write/story. I love the ending... Have a blessed day................
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:04:00 PM
ty Paula happy you liked it hugs Shadow
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:01:00 PM
Date: 5/1/2024 7:49:00 AM
Dear Shadow, I just loved how the imagery of the little girl's journey and the arrival of the man who also feels out of place is poignant. Sometimes, connection comes in unexpected forms, offering solace and understanding. - Blessings, my friend! - Daniel
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:01:00 PM
Yes you are right connections often seem strange hugs Shadow

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