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THE HUMBLE CATHEDRAL In the glaring eyes of the sun dressed thin in lush green moss, my shady sky-high trunk compeer dark brown wrinkled arms spreading free my slender fingers of verdant hue. They swing, swing in quiet seesaws attune to the cradling light of July breeze. Pleased and appeased, I puff and puff: oxygen dancing slow with other gas. The blowing winds from the east, The heaven tears cascading down, they bathe and cleansed me but! They too disturb causing murmurs and rustles during my deep sleep... Fall approaches, smell of despair hangs, it pose danger making my leaves sad. I began to weep as they slowly tumble, tumbling below, leaving me naked. Facing later the harsh bites of cold, my arms turned brittle from right to left, hearing them creak and break. Thankfully, my feet safe beneath the ground. I stood firm together with my friends, unafraid of the ice but so scared of humans carrying a sharp ax. ______________________________________ ==Contest Name: TREES PERSONIFIED== =Contest Sponsor: Charlotte Pudifoot= ~~4th Place~~ 9:32 pm, August 26, 2015

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Date: 9/15/2015 10:20:00 PM
This is such a great poem about a graceful tree and it's inherent, unpretentious majesty. You truly reveal the wide range of emotions that these beautiful entities harbor, and you create such a memorable metaphor of knowing strength in your roots and faith. I want to quote the 4th verse, "it pose danger making my leaves sad..." deep emotions Poetess, this is Masterpiece Olive...J.A.B. A FAV!
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Date: 9/4/2015 6:09:00 PM
Olive, Congratulations on your "Trees Personified" win.... SKAT
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Date: 9/3/2015 12:19:00 PM
I am a tree lover and I just fell in love with this magnificent personification of this beautiful, powerful tree! Congratulations dear Olive on your wonderful win! Pandita
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Date: 9/1/2015 3:08:00 PM
The title was what first attracted me to this lovely poem. You describe the stages that a tree goes through with feelings, both happy and sad. You can put up with nature's treatment, but that meted out by humans is hard to counter! ~ Congrats on yet another win:) hugs // paul
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Date: 8/30/2015 11:47:00 PM
Very wonderful write dear Olive! Congrats on awesome win!
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Date: 8/30/2015 8:39:00 PM
Wonderful description and flowing poem. Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 10/23/2015 2:58:00 AM
thank you so much Eve.. =`)
Date: 8/30/2015 6:45:00 PM
olive, this is a very pretty poem, with some lovely imagery - i love "cradling light of july breeze" - congrats on your win in my contest! :)
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Date: 10/23/2015 2:59:00 AM
thank you for seeing my poem worthy for a placement.. =`)
Date: 8/30/2015 4:57:00 PM
I love the title and your unique take on the theme many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/28/2015 5:12:00 AM
thanks much Jan.. I think you won also so congrats. =`)
Date: 8/28/2015 6:58:00 AM
Beautifully personified Eloisa...Blessings!
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Date: 9/16/2015 7:18:00 AM
Thank you so much Grace. I appreciate you dropping by.. =`)
Date: 8/28/2015 12:09:00 AM
I wasn't expecting this from title, such a beautiful poem!
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Date: 9/16/2015 3:35:00 AM
Gracias Arthur!.
Date: 8/27/2015 10:05:00 PM
Beautifully written Olive... Verlena
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Date: 9/16/2015 3:34:00 AM
thanks much Verlena.. =`)
Date: 8/27/2015 4:45:00 PM
beautifully drawn piece of writing olive wishing you a blessed week dear friend
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Date: 9/3/2015 8:55:00 PM
Thank you so much Liam... =')!
Date: 8/27/2015 3:33:00 PM
I like how you put yourself as a tree among a group of them that you named the humble cathedral.That was a beautiful idea. And Yes, the tree has its greatest need to fear from man, especially one carrying a horrible ax!! Great imagery!
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Date: 9/3/2015 9:40:00 AM
thanks Andie for seeing that.. =') I am glad you like it!!~thanks!
Date: 8/27/2015 2:26:00 PM
wow, what an unbreakable spirit, eloi... i like the way this ended... whoot!.. huggs
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Date: 9/3/2015 5:06:00 AM
Indeed Nette, unbreakable spirit is it.. :) thanks much for dropping by..
Date: 8/27/2015 1:28:00 PM
A tree captured splendidly Olive, loved this from start to finish. Sure to do well in the contest, rooting for you little one, hugs//James xx
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Date: 8/31/2015 9:03:00 AM
thank you so much JAmes.. =') so appreciate it.. hugs!
Date: 8/27/2015 7:46:00 AM
You did this so well, good luck in the contest!
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Date: 8/31/2015 7:40:00 AM
thank you so much Richard.. =')
Date: 8/27/2015 7:29:00 AM
Simply beautiful, Olive. You and Nette have an elegant way with your personifications. Is this for the contest? Way to go! hugs!
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Date: 8/30/2015 1:34:00 AM
Kim you as well know how to have a great flow in your poems... =')! thanks much!!! hugs back!~Olive Eloisa =')
Date: 8/26/2015 9:35:00 AM
Hey Olive, stopped by for a visit. This is an amazing work of art from you. How is it that you seem to have entered into the soul of this magnificent tree. Excellent in imagery and form and best wishes in the contest. Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 8/30/2015 1:32:00 AM
Hi Neve, I just found three pictures of the trees I like to write and when I saw this one just the thoughts keep flowing and so I wrote them down.. thank you for generously commenting.. =')!
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Date: 8/30/2015 1:32:00 AM
*Neva
Date: 8/26/2015 9:26:00 AM
I like the twist on the last two lines. Trees are attune to the changing nature of the seasons but not to the ways of how humans treat the trees. An excellent piece Kabayan. It deserves a 7. .~Nudershada
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Date: 8/30/2015 1:26:00 AM
There are three trees I was choosing from when I saw the contest but then I wanted something tricky regarding the title something that a reader might look upon and ask why it is.. =') I took time thinking how I'll end this poem.. :D and so I just touched the perils of illegal logging... thanks much!

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