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concentrate on periphery it's less dangerous or slippery edges blur, focus soften don't question reality so often frame the answer that you avoid then let thinking slide so not destroyed disregard what's out of view it may be core or coating that's untrue perfection doesn't need attention be happy, comply with convention easels stand with three points of contact laws of physics, unchallenged fact shadows are correctly situated lulled, partially sedated pretty pictures they soothe the soul relinquish self and forsake control smash obstruction, see reality lose faith in safe mortality jump through windows, trust your own sight just not right now, no, please not tonight close the curtains, forget this stage no need to worry within your cage look how peaceful we could be without an eye for surreality

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Date: 5/13/2024 1:13:00 PM
I enjoy the strong wording of your rhyme. The comparisons and choices weave a story of adventure.
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Date: 5/13/2024 1:28:00 PM
Thank you Hilda. I find surrealist art very intriguing and thought provoking. Glad you liked what I came up with, thanks for your comment x
Date: 5/13/2024 3:32:00 AM
The easel is used to stunning effect here Dilly, as indeed your interpretation is too, playing tricks on the readers mind, is this really how our subconscious works, i’m guessing it is, we fill in a lot of the blanks ourselves, I’m still seeing a pipe though, lol! Super-imperceptible perception as always from you, outstandingly worded, cheers David
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Date: 5/13/2024 3:40:00 AM
Thank you David - I do wonder if most people don't consider this stuff at all. I don't dwell on it (despite my poetic leanings of late) but it is fascinating. Pretty sure I'll scratch the surface at some point and see something evidential. Is it fun to be open minded? I'm not 100% sold haha thank you for your visit and spending time with my thoughts
Date: 5/12/2024 10:22:00 PM
Like this a lot, great last stanza, wraps it all up nicely while still leaving to ponder :) well done!
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Date: 5/13/2024 12:12:00 AM
Thank you H, it was a great one to do as I was drifting off but left it as draft as it feels unfinished (despite the last line being in place - I suppose that's exactly how it always is - the middle is missing!) Nice to see you, thanks for your comment x

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