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The Ages

In the beginning, twas created!: The acorn, elephant trunk, government branch, leaf of paper; only to be crumpled up into the streets and chewed upon by a squirrel, those thoughts I threw away a week ago. ------------------------------------------------- The form of the poem may not be correct. So if anyone knows what form this is, please tell me.

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/9/2012 10:34:00 AM

OK ..even though the imagery is intersting and the path [seed/trunk/branch/leaf] is interesting one comes away think so? OK? now what do you the poet wish me to conclude? Your mail related to this write..OK first off I would not use TWAS in a verse which has no old english content [it was] second to be complete you need some sort of context. This is neither the beginning of a mental romp nor the middle nor the end but COULD be anyone of the 3 but is not enough content for a whole poem.L&L

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/7/2012 11:24:00 AM

Hi new friend yes you may safely call this Free Verse, when ever in doubt you can use Verse [never use I do Not Know] if there's even a bit of rhyme in it Rhyme is also a safe category On your verse above I would expand a bit, soup mail mw what you are trying to get across and I can help more. Light & Love