Tear Juice

. Peeling off layers I'm slice'n, dice'n, chopp'n Onion cries in pain

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Date: 10/10/2009 9:01:00 AM

What a clever use of personification. Got a chuckle out of the last line. I like the use of language in the second line--gives your poem an informal feel which works well. Thank you for sharing this day brightener with us and for your kind commments. Karen

Robin L. Gass

Date: 10/4/2009 10:04:00 AM

Potent Senryu, Abe! Many layers deep! Love. Robin

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/2/2009 3:50:00 PM

I like what you did with the title, that is cute

Moonbee Canady

Date: 9/23/2009 2:45:00 PM

Abe... I Love When Recipies Call for Onions, You must have a white onion in mind, cause they make me cry more than the red or yellow ones... (Hey, did the Onion say Ouch? smile) MoonBee

Savannah Rose Harper

Date: 9/21/2009 12:30:00 PM

ONIONSONIONSONIONS yea oh man u make me hungry for them onions! love the detail hey onions and Shrek are alike....layers....~$avannah~

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/21/2009 10:03:00 AM

Mix a little sugar with it and it tastes great. No pain no gain lol. Loved this Abe, Thank you. Love, Carol

Veronica Joseph

Date: 9/21/2009 9:06:00 AM

laughing..for some reason makes me think of making chili.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/21/2009 7:28:00 AM

Thanks for the challenge Abe ..:)there it goes my onion senryu--Charma,still smiling..

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/21/2009 6:37:00 AM

Hahaha,i love this onion game:)the crying onion must be smiling watching all these writes,an onion can become famous too:),sweet write Abe,nearly inspired me to write about an onion too:)Charma

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/20/2009 5:28:00 PM

I like to see all the different work one subject. Nice work let's see what's next

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/20/2009 4:50:00 PM

Love it Abe !!! Thanks again for giving me new ideas to "paint with poetry!" My onion is peeling too!! :) Thanks for including me in your challenges.... the motivation really helps me!! PS. ... perhaps you will submit some art work of the Pecan tree sometime!! Have you captured it in paint??

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/20/2009 4:17:00 PM

Lightly humorous here. Keep writing. Sara