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Freckles fall from Tatters downtrodden countenance. They fell like snow onto his chest below. Only one landed on his nose, Rudolph-proud. He shared Bozo’s hair - orange and red - a frenetic flair. Face is narrow, pale - with blue eyes - used to be pie in the sky blueberry…now Tatters is just blue. Lips, thin and pink; eyebrows like charcoal crows. Tatters donned his clown suit when he was twenty-one, after he downed his first whiskey at the circus. A drunken clown - is there any other - aren’t they funnier? Audience applauds when he attempts a unicycle and when he rides pink elephants. Now twenty-five he longs to shed his jaundice billow of ruffles chained about his neck. He will! He did! But alas it is too late. He’s not nearly as funny…his elephant’s gray, but… he still falls off his seat - the crowd applauds at his insane antics when he tumbles from the unicycle. Only the redhead teen, with freckles, sees a tattered-tear splashdown in the big tent. Her sensitive hands will speak as she depicts his suffering in indelible ink. The clown gains serious applause - after all his life’s framed in the teen’s blueberry eyes. 1/5/2023

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Date: 1/13/2023 4:59:00 PM
Such a wonderful and interesting narrative poem my dear friend Kim. Congratulations on your 2nd place win! Thanks for sharing! Hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/13/2023 4:59:00 PM
Thank you, my friend Len!
Date: 1/13/2023 6:48:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this reality in your excellent poetic style. God bless you.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/13/2023 7:41:00 AM
God bless you too, sweet poet! :)
Date: 1/12/2023 6:25:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Kim! Tatters hides behind a clown's frown, great piece! Tears of a clown...when there's no one around!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/12/2023 6:33:00 PM
Thank you, Anaya!
Date: 1/12/2023 9:36:00 AM
A HUGE congrats on your win, Kim! Janice
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/12/2023 12:59:00 PM
Thanks, Janice!
Date: 1/12/2023 6:45:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely write. Have a blessed day.......................
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/12/2023 12:59:00 PM
Thanks, Paula!
Date: 1/12/2023 4:01:00 AM
This is a lovely depiction of the clown in tatters. I love the romantic flavor you have added to his otherwise sad and miserable existence, A lovely poem and a well deserved high placement. Congratulations dear Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/12/2023 12:59:00 PM
Thank you, Valsa!
Date: 1/11/2023 5:29:00 PM
Fantastic No.2!! Congratz. ;o]
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/11/2023 8:34:00 PM
Thank you, Arlo!
Date: 1/6/2023 8:20:00 AM
Loved your description of a clown in tatters. Hope all is well at home. My New Year began with a terrible toothache. And more will come. Hugs.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/6/2023 8:26:00 AM
Hope you’re doing better <3

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