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Tanka 4 - Treasure of My Soul

Tanka 4 – Treasure of My Soul dampness of your skin wet hair dripping down your back glancing toward me one small laugh escapes your lips a deep treasure of my soul For Gail Angel Doyle’s “Treasures of your soul” contest

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 8/19/2013 5:18:00 PM

Oh, I love this Jack,,,, kinda reminds me of my Sweet Ecstasy ;} you have a great day .

Jack Jordan
Date: 8/19/2013 5:32:00 PM

It has been a good day. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem... Jack

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 8/4/2013 7:25:00 PM

Hi Jack; This is short, good. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest..... Lucilla

Jack Jordan
Date: 8/19/2013 5:32:00 PM

Thanks, Lucilla, but the contest didn't happen. I'm not sure why... Jack

Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/31/2013 6:36:00 AM

Every line a treasured meaning. Beautiful in this poetry form. Delicious :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/31/2013 7:43:00 AM

Thank you, Karen. I appreciate the very nice compliment... Jack

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/29/2013 12:31:00 PM

wellll, you said it so richly in just a few words, jack...simple delights are treasures, and this is a treasure of a piece!..:) huggs

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/29/2013 1:56:00 PM

Thank you,Nette. Very kind comments... Jack

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/27/2013 9:09:00 AM

Ahhh!! Romantic..Sara

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/27/2013 11:12:00 AM

Thank you for the comment, Sara... Jack

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/27/2013 6:42:00 AM

This is so romantic and sexy. I have the picture flickering on my mind.

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/27/2013 8:18:00 AM

Mine too. If it ever actually happened to me, It was long ago. Thanks for the comment, Richard... Jack

Donna Jones

Date: 7/26/2013 1:44:00 PM

Jack I can hear and feel the moment!!!! CAPTURED!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/26/2013 2:52:00 PM

Thanks for the compliment. I'm glad you liked it... Jack

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/25/2013 11:40:00 PM

This must be the new contest of Gail's? Wow, you nailed it!!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/26/2013 8:51:00 AM

Thanks! Tanka are difficult for me. Maybe I just don't have 31syllables in me all the time... Jack

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/25/2013 6:18:00 AM

- Jack, this is beautiful!! - Cross my fingers and hope it will win the contest!! - Have a nice day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/25/2013 6:48:00 AM

Thanks, Anne Lise, for the good wishes... Jack

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/24/2013 5:18:00 PM

Yes! The simple pleasures of it all! I love a lady with the wet hair look. Awesome!

Jack Jordan
Date: 7/24/2013 5:44:00 PM

Thanks, Drake. Simple pleasures indeed... Jack