Tanka 2b

Night following day Commonplace and unremarked Scales fall from our eyes Starlight pierces mind and soul God revealed if one but looks! A poem dedicated to my friends Eileen, Mary Jo and Anne-Lise. Thank you for you patience with me. with speciasl thanks to Andrea for her help. This is a reworking of my previous poem Tanka 2. I hope that this is more in line with the true form of a Tanka. I would really appreciate feed back on this. Thanks Shane posted 31/03/2015

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2015 2:12:00 PM

shane, this one WAS improved over the first one. I like that contrast of the common night and seeing it with new eyes!

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/30/2015 3:30:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I think this is about the limit of my ability in this form. I just cannot find the words to make it beautiful. Thank you for your help, it was appreciated. love Shane xxx