Tanka 2

Swirling clouds twisting High above the silent town Constant movement with Starlight illuminating A scene of grace and beauty

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2015 2:11:00 PM

Nice description, Shane. I am hearing of funny poems you are producing. Let me try to find one!

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/30/2015 9:20:00 PM

I wrote some footles in whichI tried to be funny, you can judge for yourself if I made the grade. I don't think I am even in Jan's ballpark though. Too much sad sack in me. Love Shane xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/30/2015 7:26:00 AM

:) my friend !!!

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/30/2015 7:31:00 AM

you do know you are a treasure don't you!!!! I wish I could, but my heart just will not play anymore. You take care of yourself you are special people! love Shanexxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/26/2015 1:46:00 PM

- Shane my friend, the words floating in beautifully inks - Enjoy reading this tanka poem, it's a winner poem in my eyes - (7) - I have never written a Tanka - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/30/2015 12:48:00 AM

Hello Anne-Lise, Thank you for your kind words but the poem is fundamentally flawed. It is not really a Tanka. I have tried to rewrite it but i am not a good enough trainee poet to find the words i need. I will withdraw it soon. love Shane xxx

Jan Allison

Date: 3/26/2015 8:06:00 AM

wonderful image and imagery I struggle so hard with this form:-) Hugs jan xx

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/26/2015 8:42:00 AM

Maybe, but they look pretty good to me. :-) <3<3

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2015 8:26:00 AM

I have more than my fair share of N/A HM lol - I write for fun and try to impress the sponsors - hey ho its just poetry. I find tanka and haiku hard to get right - still got a long way to go before I get it right:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/26/2015 8:20:00 AM

At least my dear friend you place in competitions I get the dreaded N/A. GREEN WITH ENVY, AISLE SEA EWE and MOONLIGHT SHADOW, your last three posts are all way beyond the standard, as I said you are in a whole new ball park with these writes. They are wonderful. love Shane xxx

Casarah Nance

Date: 3/26/2015 7:44:00 AM

It is a beautiful piece of art and a wonderful write to go with it :) Hugs xxx

Casarah Nance
Date: 3/26/2015 8:39:00 AM

Thank you for bringing so much wonderful art into our lives, it doesn't have to be writing, but painting and music, it all soothes the soul. :)

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/26/2015 8:23:00 AM

Hi Cas, glad you jumped into my wee little bowl for a look see! Van Gough is my number one fav artist. He was a master poet but instead of quils he used brushes. take care and enjoy the rest of your week love Shane xxx

Emile Pinet

Date: 3/26/2015 7:33:00 AM

Your structure is very good and the theme flows throughout the work, complimenting the artist's brush. Emile.

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/30/2015 4:40:00 PM

THank you Emile love Shane