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Sweats and Sweets

You broke it off and you broke my heart so today; I stayed inside crying -- wearing blue sweats from the dollar-mart. You broke it off and you broke my heart I’ll finish the ice cream and then I’ll start a new box of chocolates, denying… You broke it off and you broke my heart so today; I stayed inside crying. 06/14/15 Entry for Contest: SWEATS and SWEETS Hosted by: Olive Eloisa Guillermo

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/20/2015 8:27:00 AM

I really enjoyed this write. Oh...the comfort of chocolate! You really did well by the theme. Good luck in the contest.

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/17/2015 2:17:00 PM

A poem that flirts with the reader's emotions and tries to make light of tears that fall from saddened eye. Emile.

Skat A

Date: 6/15/2015 2:24:00 AM

good luck in the contest

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 6/14/2015 9:12:00 PM

Great job Preston. Good luck in the contest.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/14/2015 10:44:00 PM

Thanks Janet. =)

Lewis Raynes

Date: 6/14/2015 8:18:00 PM

i love this simple, direct poem, strong 7 here.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/14/2015 10:44:00 PM

Thanks Lewis. I personally find the triolet to be a deceptively difficult form to use. I honestly don't think it ever sounds quite right when I try to use it, so I am glad you appreciate this one.