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Into the wake of waves he rides. The surfer glides like bird in flight. He slips, gets up, head on collides, into the wake of waves he rides. His graceful dance with winds and tides shows love for ocean at first sight. Into the wake of waves he rides; the surfer glides like bird in flight.
29 May 2015 For Andrea Dietrich's Lovely Summer Triolet Contest

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Date: 7/2/2015 7:52:00 AM
Nice Triolet, Kim. Great imagery.
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Date: 6/17/2015 10:07:00 PM
YOu asked me for advice on how to do better next time, so I came here to remind myself of your poem. It is really good for words. The problem was minor and lay mainly in punctuation. You need to finish the sentences with a period instead of a comma. I notice several poets doing this, not just you. It was just lines 2 and 3! (oh, and remove the comma after line 5) The beat is RIGHT ON.
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Date: 6/15/2015 9:30:00 AM
A wonderful descriptive write, Kim! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim M.
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Date: 6/13/2015 8:35:00 PM
Hi Kim, I love how you brought that visual to life with your verbal imagery! Congrats on your nice win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 6/13/2015 6:29:00 PM
KIM, Congratulations on your LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET ----- SKAT :-)
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Date: 6/13/2015 3:15:00 PM
I'm so pleased to be back with congratulations, Kim! Much deserved. // paul
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Date: 6/13/2015 5:42:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats Kim:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 6/13/2015 1:04:00 AM
very nice one, Kim. Congrats in my contest.
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Date: 6/13/2015 12:56:00 AM
Kim, I just stopped by to say congrats on your win:)Alexis
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Date: 6/4/2015 4:46:00 PM
Superb, great visual this paints in my mind! Rgds Laura
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Date: 6/3/2015 9:18:00 AM
Kim, i love the lines,,, simply captivating bringing me there~olive eloisa =')
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Date: 6/2/2015 5:35:00 PM
Brilliant write - magnificent imagery. This is definitely a winner in my books! I rate it a "7!" Well done, my firend! Pandita
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Date: 6/2/2015 3:51:00 PM
Hi Kim! I see that you and I chose the same visual! Yet, we tackled it in completely different ways. I love yours, especially the "graceful dance with winds and tides". gl in the contest. hugs // paul
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Date: 6/2/2015 12:42:00 PM
Your words are bubbling over with fun and excitement, well in tune with the theme of surfing the waves. Emile.
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Date: 6/1/2015 1:44:00 PM
Kim, this is lovely for the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, shameonyou
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Date: 6/1/2015 12:07:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your very descriptive contest entry..Reads like a winner to me..I can see the scene of a surfer in the crest of the wave and blue green water all around him..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 6/1/2015 9:40:00 AM
I feel like I am there!
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Date: 6/1/2015 5:55:00 AM
- Great to see when they ride the waves ..... but no thanks for me :) (You?) - A summery image, dear Kim - A wonderful poem! - Hope your weekend was great and relaxed - Good luck in the contest! - hugs & <3 // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/31/2015 7:46:00 AM
Love this one, Kim! Always admire your talented words - genuine and lovely poetry! Always, Laura
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Date: 5/30/2015 9:26:00 PM
Makes me want to head to the beach...I'll be on the boat watching the surfers.
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Date: 5/30/2015 7:29:00 PM
Kim very nice triolet as both Peter and Lindsay said sharks are our problem but surfing is a great sport, my nephew is one good luck in the contest and take care..........Vera.............
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Date: 5/29/2015 5:46:00 PM
G'day Kim... sounds good without sharks being mentioned. I felt like on the shore watching the surfer while I read your poem - good luck - Lindsay
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Date: 5/29/2015 11:53:00 AM
I like yours better than mine! Love it :-) especially the imagery from "His graceful dance with winds and tides,"
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Date: 5/29/2015 9:27:00 AM
Nope not a surfer but love playing in the ocean.
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Date: 5/29/2015 8:54:00 AM
This makes me long for the ocean!
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