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Sunset

Our relationship rose over the horizon We were very happy and the sun burned You touched me in places where I enjoyed The newness and the caresses It was fresh And like a crystal clear message you sound You are the one that I'm meant to melt And my heart filled with tender thoughts We rolled through flowered fields in hunger And still The first fight and burned our memories But then hugs and kisses and a smile Doubt crept between those clean sheets We tried bleach but it only made white And then You swept the floor with me and then mopped The love was squeezed and wrung And like flowers in a vase wilted My heart shattered and burned as the last ray Sunset

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 3/20/2012 12:03:00 PM
Great creative description. With a plesasant flow to it. Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 2/20/2012 10:07:00 AM
such a sentimental and emotive poem,thanks for sharing -Charma
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Date: 2/18/2012 12:52:00 PM
When YOU love someone you pour everything you've got into it...the last stanza is super crafty. I love the idea that you became a mop...then she squeezed everything out of you leaving you dehydrated..I think this imagery is masterful...Enjoyed this small expression of your relationship, Patrick. Gwendolen ps..thanks for the mail. You are certainly welcome.
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Date: 2/18/2012 12:14:00 AM
Some creative imagery used here! Very nice piece. - Chuck
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