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At dawns first light I abandoned you A soul so full of love An effervescent hue At my first sight I fell in love Rescued from sin Angel of above And now in pain My heartless soul Forbidden treasures No longer whole For you are lost And surely gone I weep for you All is done An empty heart A worthless soul No longer exists My precious whole

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/29/2024 4:59:00 AM

Dear Kelli, the poem lays bare the agony of loss with poignant simplicity. Like shards of broken glass, your words reflect the rawness of a heart shattered by abandonment. I loved the imagery of dawn's light and forbidden treasures encapsulating the depth of sorrow and longing. Kelli, what a haunting lamentation that has tasted the bitterness of love's absence. Excellent! - Blessings, Daniel

Kelli White
Date: 3/29/2024 6:33:00 PM

Thank you so much Daniel you are an angel from above, Kelli

Silent One

Date: 3/28/2024 3:44:00 PM

A sad poem Kelli...always sad when this happens

Kelli White
Date: 3/29/2024 6:34:00 PM

Fictional my friend thank you so much