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                 ~Fiction~

 

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                           

"Sometimes things only become clear when we are old enough to grasp what the universe is trying to tell us." ~~The Poet~~ Had it been labelled charity? Gazing at that star of clarity. Watching it make its trajectory Drifting through my memory. Long lost from my childhood days, Motherless, a father to praise. Though I was told of her love, Left me, now lives in heaven above. I recall his love as he took care of me, But he left me there when I was three. To play with orphans and waifs like me. Was the last of my father I was ever to see. Gazing at that shining star of clarity, There creeps a ray of unfamiliarity. Now though what seemed prison bars, The orphanage window frames the stars. I see many stars of clarity shining fair, A vison of him handing me that tiny bear. It was cold, not cuddly as a bear should be. It wasn’t for play, unsure why he gave it to me. Now, all these years later I gaze at that tiny bear, Looking deep into it, I see him standing there, Giving me something he knew would last. In crystal clear clarity his love was never surpassed.

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Date: 12/5/2023 4:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely write/love the bear picture/a true quote/great ending. Have a wonderful day with your win...............
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Date: 12/4/2023 2:30:00 PM
You expressed the theme very well..I can see why it placed so high..
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Date: 12/4/2023 3:30:00 PM
Thanks S.O. Some poems just write themselves and turn out the best. This was one such piece. Unfortunately I can never predict if my muse is in the mood for taking over or not. Your words of encouragement are appreciated.
Date: 12/4/2023 8:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your 1st place win with your original poem. I loved the quote that encapsulated the poems beautiful message x
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Date: 12/4/2023 11:48:00 AM
Thanks D. Your comments always mean a lot to me. I know they are honest. You yourself are an artist that uses words as your paint and feeling as your brushes.
Date: 12/4/2023 2:06:00 AM
This is such a soul touching, poignant story that really speaks to my heart. I absolutely loved the flow of your word weaving and how you’ve done storytelling in such a poetic manner with brilliant rhymes and alliterations. Especially the ending is brilliant. Congratulations on your win, well deserved, thank you for sharing
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Date: 12/4/2023 2:20:00 AM
Empress knowing your preference for free verse poems, it is an honor to be counted amongst the winners of your contest. Something I truly wasn't expecting. Thank you for your gracious words. Best wishes.
Date: 11/29/2023 9:55:00 AM
Very sweet poem with emotions.
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Date: 11/29/2023 5:54:00 PM
Thank you my friend, I am glad you liked it.
Date: 11/20/2023 7:25:00 AM
Sweet and melancholy and fabulous dear Svvie! laf :)
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Date: 11/21/2023 3:19:00 PM
Sometimes things only become clear when we are old enough to grasp what the universe is trying to tell us. Thanks for your comment Las, my sweet friend.
Date: 11/20/2023 4:42:00 AM
Dear Wen, Your exquisite style incites a torrent of lucid fantasies which are delicately intertwined into your enthralling couplet. The touching memories of your father's caring supervision are amazing. Your poetry provides a vivid picture in which you lock your gaze on a small bear, demonstrating an unrivaled depth of compassion. The imagery you produce is simply amazing. Great poem, BOL with the contest
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Date: 11/20/2023 5:01:00 AM
Sweet Lasaad, we are both starting with a handicap as Empress expressed her preference for free verse poems for this competition, but your exquisite work will easily overcome such a handicap and sail through to the winners circle. I entered knowing mine wont, but I as you know I enjoy writing in rhyme so that's all that matters. Thanks for lovely comment BOL & best wishes from Wen
Date: 11/19/2023 4:06:00 PM
a poignant yet sweet poem, SV. It's certainly a fabulous contender for the contest. The couplet form worked well as you wove the story and message, one of star-like clarity. Well done!!! Have a great Thanksgiving, Sara
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Date: 11/19/2023 4:23:00 PM
Thank you dear Sara. It wont contend, Empress prefers Free Verse, but I had to remain true to what I do best. Your comment is my prize.

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