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Sour Girl

Lemonade drips on her cracked freckled lips, I was studying the way that she speaks, Her tone got rough, like she's had enough, she was tired of amusing the freaks. Her eyes were aged like a sage in deep study, I was drowning in the wisdom of word, the moment came, she was shouting my name, and I knew my infatuation was absurd. She moved like a model on a runway, her hips were like heaven to watch. I thought I could be hers someday, or at least another bedpost notch. I went inside where the mysteries hide, caramel smooth I told her what i would do, her hands were cold in a barbie doll mold She says okay I have chosen it to be you. I followed her home, we would be alone she undressed me like a nurse in a war. her silhouette was a sight I won't forget but her moves I couldn't take anymore. She moved like a model on a runway her hips were like heaven to watch. I thought I could be hers someday, or a least another bedpost notch. She lacked the sugar to make her sweet, a bitter taste in my mouth when I eat A sour girl from her head to her feet. The strangest girl I ever did meet. A sour girl, a sour girl, a sour girl, a sour girl.....

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Date: 11/2/2019 11:02:00 AM
It seems I am enamoured with this one, it has drawn me back once again. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 10/16/2019 8:47:00 AM
Dropping by with a hi and a hug. I enjoyed reading this one again. I miss you being here. ;0)
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Date: 9/5/2019 8:01:00 AM
This is beyond good Casarah, I would go so far as to say exceptional. You gave a two dimensional character depth. I am left to ponder what she experienced that caused her to sour. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 4/28/2019 4:23:00 AM
Your "Sour Girl" is deserving of a good composer, Casarah! Very creative, catchy and smooth flowing. ~ Really stopped by to see how you're doing; your absence has not gone unnoticed. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 4/17/2019 1:05:00 PM
Very strong concept and a deep write. Loved this piece.Hugs........//Manmath//
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Date: 3/2/2019 1:28:00 AM
Stoppin' by to say hi, Casarah! a titch of sugar always helps, but sour is a favorite! jimbo
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Date: 12/20/2018 12:51:00 PM
You are such a great artist, Casarah. I have been much of a sour girl here of late,, and I am not a raven beauty. :) Merry Christmas to you, your daughter. and your family.
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Date: 12/16/2018 6:02:00 AM
Damn sounds like one bitter woman.. Nice to see you posting..
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Date: 12/15/2018 4:25:00 PM
I could fell the rhythm in this one. Definitely lyrical. Good write.--mark
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Date: 12/15/2018 7:41:00 AM
you've not lost your touch with your incredible lyrics Cas, such vivid description I love it!:-) adding this gem to my faves:-) hugs Jan xx
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