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Since You Abandoned Me

Rarely do I glimpse your shadow Or wonder how you had the gall I hardly think of you at all Rarely wish it'll be your hello Time has allowed me to believe I'm fine since you abandoned me Rarely am I sad or morose I'm not sorry you're missing out I do wonder if you have doubt Rarely say your name even low I've decided I will forgive If this is how I'll have to live To ignore me is cruel though You've never said why you are through I rarely ever think of you Rarely do I glimpse your shadow Rarely wish it'll be your hello Rarely am I sad or morose Rarely say your name even low To ignore me is cruel though July 16, 2018 July 25, 2018 - Abandon 2 Contest By Brenda Chiri Form - Constanza Third Place The Constanza created by Connie Marcum Wong consists of five or more 3-line stanzas. Each line eight syllables. All the first lines of all the stanzas form an independent poem as the rest of the poem expresses a deeper meaning. The first lines are in mono-rhyme while the second and third lines of each stanza rhyme together. Rhyme scheme: a/b/b a/c/c a/d/d a/e/e a/f/f........etc. And the end verse is made up of the first lines of all the previous verses combined.

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Date: 10/30/2020 11:57:00 AM
I feel the same
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Date: 7/29/2018 7:15:00 AM
Please accept my belated congratulations Susan for your well deserved win with this well written constanza. :))
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/29/2018 8:51:00 PM
Why thank you so much! :)
Date: 7/27/2018 6:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this well written poem with great imagery. Hugs Eve
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/28/2018 12:10:00 AM
Thanks so much, Eve.
Date: 7/26/2018 3:08:00 PM
Here all along I think you rarely think of me at all but you mention me in the second line! What can I say? Seriously though, fine intricate work, terrific rhyme pattern in a disciplined and thoughtful verse. Congrats on your deserved win.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/27/2018 6:30:00 PM
Thank you, Greg. :) maybe convincing herself? Appreciate you reading and commenting.
Date: 7/26/2018 8:48:00 AM
You do well to forgive. Congrats on your win. This is well expressed.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/27/2018 6:29:00 PM
Thank you, Richard. Appreciate your input.
Date: 7/25/2018 6:58:00 PM
Sad but healed feelings of abandonment powerfully conveyed in your skilled use of the Constanza form, Susan. Congratulations on your podium win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/25/2018 10:13:00 PM
Thank you, Sandra. Means a lot from you.
Date: 7/18/2018 8:02:00 AM
Love the depth of feeling, you have created, here in this wonderful poem.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/22/2018 5:12:00 AM
Thank you, Harry!
Date: 7/18/2018 7:33:00 AM
It's certainly sad when a relationship ends...I know, I've been there too. But things happen for a reason. Usually for the better :) Well written, Susan. Good luck in the contest and if this is about you...chin up my dear friend...Charlie
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/22/2018 5:11:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 7/17/2018 11:02:00 PM
If that person had experienced the talent in this poem there is no way they could ignore you!
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/22/2018 5:11:00 AM
Ahhh :)
Date: 7/17/2018 3:13:00 PM
So stirring and sad, good luck in the contest!
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/17/2018 8:29:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 7/17/2018 1:45:00 PM
Sincerely written, Susan, I am not sure if this is true or fiction. Good luck in the contest. // Barry.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/17/2018 8:21:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 7/17/2018 10:28:00 AM
Sometimes time doesn't heal all wounds, well done Susan...
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/17/2018 11:00:00 AM
Thank you. So true. :)
Date: 7/17/2018 4:51:00 AM
Susan, I can feel the angst and pain of not knowing why a relationship ended. It's maddening and you want to forget, but can you really?
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/17/2018 7:02:00 AM
No, not forget. Learn to live with it though. Faith helps too. Thank you for your comments.
Date: 7/17/2018 12:33:00 AM
Methinks the speaker doth protest too much!" Lovely poem, Susan! Janice
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/17/2018 7:00:00 AM
You may be right. :)
Date: 7/16/2018 11:36:00 PM
"Rarely do I think of your voice Time has allowed me to believe I'm fine since you abandoned me" speaks to the reader, reminiding us that abandonment takes time to get over. The last line ties in nicely with the theme too. Nicely built. Good luck in the contest, Susan.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/17/2018 6:56:00 AM
Thanks Caren. Appreciate your comment. :)
Date: 7/16/2018 9:39:00 PM
Good Rhyme. Rhythmic flow.
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Date: 7/16/2018 5:53:00 PM
Susan, maybe I forgot the form, but are the lines supposed to rhyme on the bottom?I will go remind myself. If not for that, this was a really great poem!!
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/16/2018 6:11:00 PM
Yes, you are right! I forgot that part. I'll have to figure that out. Until then will make it a rhyme only. Thank you!
Date: 7/16/2018 4:47:00 PM
Interesting...I like the way you delivered the message..."Ignoring me is cruel to do" All the best Susan
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/16/2018 5:40:00 PM
Thanks so much.
Date: 7/16/2018 11:08:00 AM
Mental bullying is sometimes worse than physical bullying, you heal but it takes time.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 7/16/2018 5:40:00 PM
Yes it is and the scars are not obvious. Time and good support has helped me. The worst part is no knowing why... it was a close relative.

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