Sheol

Dark Knight-tress Underneath This gown I feel nothing Silk less feelings The odor of intimate apparel lessens Vanity fare from any sun Warrior of beauty Where have you gone? A fortress of gloom Not even death wants in Black nail tips Brownish plum lips I close my eyes I see them all The Shadows Climbing over my soul The darken deepens The stars dim my view Irremovable makeup Land becomes an enemy I become The Dark Knight-tress Scolding my next victim ~S~

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Pearl Allen

Date: 10/20/2016 6:14:00 AM

Deep, it pulled me into the darkness.

Charlie Ramos

Date: 7/20/2016 5:19:00 PM

This is deep Charrr

Boygene Rabura

Date: 10/29/2015 10:52:00 AM

i felt like chewing each line of this poem. those feelings well expressed :)

Neil Kruger

Date: 10/13/2015 12:17:00 PM

That gave me a new perspective on hell. Very well written.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/13/2015 7:06:00 PM

oops, looks like you don't have soupmail, so I will ask you here and hope you just comment back to me somewhere on one of my poems. One of my friends thinks that your haiku contest on feathers needs to leave out feathers from the haiku or senryu since you said, "put feathers in the title." I interpreted you to mean, we have to put the word feather or feathers in the title. but this does not mean we have to leave the word out of the poem. Am I right or wrong. Please let me know , will ya?

Kelly Deschler

Date: 7/4/2015 3:48:00 PM

Yes, we do need to revisit our dark sides every now and then... This poem is one of my favorites, SKAT. It's nice to see this on the winner's list. Congrats to you!

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/1/2015 9:46:00 PM

I enjoyed this amazing trip to the dark side and love the imagery! Congratulations on a well-deserved win, my friend! Pandita

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/1/2015 3:26:00 PM

This dramatic, evocative poem vividly describes the dark side. Congrats on the win. Janice

Skat A

Date: 6/30/2015 12:34:00 AM

Thank you ROB

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/29/2015 8:14:00 PM

Into the abyss she goes.... deep and dark... 'vanity fare'- love it. Great write, Skat. Wll done. Viv x

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/29/2015 4:49:00 PM

Enjoyed your imaginative, if dark, take on the meaning of Sheol, Skat. Great write :)

John Fleming

Date: 2/26/2015 1:00:00 AM

It is certainly very dark! However, depending on how you read it, it does appear to allude to a certain amount of intimate ambiguity. Very nicely done...An excellent little poem!! :) john.

Joel Thornton

Date: 12/5/2014 3:59:00 AM

a 7! Amazing,, I absolutely love your way with words,,, incredibly good, You rock.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 5/3/2014 6:23:00 PM

Skat my dear friend loved the ending on this one it's magnificent just wonderful. cheri

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 5/3/2014 12:28:00 AM

Nice Skat... very Nice. Thanks for your congratulations of my win in latest contest of Kelly - Poem on Poetry. I have enjoyed my visit... Verlena

Paul Callus

Date: 4/22/2014 3:28:00 PM

Dark and dramatic effects that permeate into the night. Awesome!! going into my favs. // paul

Chris Bedave

Date: 3/19/2014 4:28:00 PM

this is a cool poem bout death

Christopher Thor Britt

Date: 3/1/2014 11:25:00 PM

Wow Skat. Dark Knight-ress indeed. Your words put me in mind of the depiction of hell (sheol) from the movie, "What Dreams May Come" Your poem was expertly written, and I enjoyed it. Grats! Christopher Thor Britt

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2014 10:22:00 PM

This is an awesome poem. CAn't remember when it was first posted but I love it. congrats!

Len Gasun

Date: 2/28/2014 8:58:00 PM

Good morning my dearest Skat! Biggest hugs! So glad to read this stunning write of yours once again and saw it won. My big hearty congratulations on your top win! Kudos and more sweet hugs to u! Thank u so much again for sharing. I want also to take this opportunity to thank you for liking my dedicated poems. More blessings to u and your family! Have a great wkend to all! Sending love & smiles this wkend! lovem4ever, Leonora

Kelly Deschler

Date: 2/28/2014 7:38:00 PM

I do remember this dark poem, because it is on my favorites list! ;) Love this one, SKAT! Congratulations on your win, as well!

Gary Watkins

Date: 2/28/2014 6:57:00 PM

Very dramatic. Congratulations on a well deserved win. Cheers.