Sad Love

Stocking soda.... Rising from the cellar With an unfinished coda. Poor, possessed fella. Rising from the cellar. Watching for her, Poor, possessed fella. The world a spinning blur. Watching for her, Elvis knees, gut fails. The world a spinning blur. Down the block she sails. Elvis knees, gut fails, Forever chasing light. Down the block she sails. A firefly in flight Forever chasing light, Until a darkness done. A firefly in flight. A madness on the run. Until a darkness done, With an unfinished coda. A madness on the run, Stocking soda....

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Timothy Barry

Date: 7/28/2016 8:01:00 PM

Great technique and feeling Teddy!

Tom Arnone
Date: 7/28/2016 8:15:00 PM

Who is Teddy? ;-)

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/28/2016 8:52:00 AM

Congrats Tom, for having your piece featured in the Poetrysoup homepage!! ;-)

Tom Arnone
Date: 7/28/2016 8:54:00 AM

Thanks, Teddy. :-)

Jane Allen

Date: 7/27/2016 12:55:00 PM

Really enjoyed Sad Love. Lovely rolling rhythm and beautiful imagery

Tom Arnone
Date: 7/27/2016 3:06:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jane, for those kind words. :-)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/21/2016 11:34:00 AM

Sounds like a fizz rising. Sad and insane to run the same course.... enjoyed. LINDA

Jaquay Atkins

Date: 4/21/2016 11:05:00 AM

Your rhythm in this piece is astounding

Tom Arnone
Date: 4/21/2016 3:01:00 PM

The word, astounding, is rhythm to my ears! ;-) Thanks for the compliment....

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/20/2016 8:56:00 PM

Tom I love this one and the shortness of the lines!! But I never heard of a stocking soda. What is that?? I just realized you must be seeing my "best poems" list. Gotta check out one of your best now.

Tom Arnone
Date: 4/21/2016 8:00:00 AM

"Stocking soda," in this context, means restocking cases of soda/pop: When I was a youngster, I used to work in a neighborhood grocery store. One of my duties was to replenish merchandise from the storage area in the cellar.