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Romancing the Incomprehensible

Now here I am floating in the vessel The warmth still here in this body of water Soon I shall release this flesh Open the wound that pains me so It is calling me now A romance with the darkness To think I am in control I was given the master key The key to me I shall manipulate the how, the why Don’t cry Tears only pool my vision Slowly I will descend into my shallow breath Muffling under water distance echoes I leaving this body now Blue blood turns to scarlet ribbons Scarlet ribbons grow like hungry snakes Soon the vessel bleeds a cardinal’s coat Pale extremities adrift Peacefully stagnant Lifeless in winter’s abyss

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/23/2009 1:16:00 PM
very good work...like the imagery and the darkness seeping through!
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Date: 7/22/2009 11:56:00 PM
Very nice write. I can seriously see the dark side of your nature...I like it!
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Date: 7/10/2009 3:10:00 AM
Had to read this one twice but only because I loved it ... nice work Jayne :)
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Date: 6/4/2009 10:25:00 PM
A great bouquet of imageries makes a rich carpet for the eyes of the reader and say this poem is pure awesomeness.
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Date: 5/23/2009 6:14:00 PM
amazing free style it makes one read and analyze again and again great poem thanks for the comment
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Date: 5/23/2009 5:47:00 PM
Your Free verse poems are great Laura. I love reading them. Great job once again. Thanks for your comments. Nate
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Date: 5/23/2009 5:04:00 PM
Poetry...... my Life line from life. Really enjoyed this poetry and will have to read more of you. Fire!!! thats what this poem is. The good kind you can depend to burn for good. Enjoy your day.
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Date: 5/23/2009 4:09:00 PM
Love the title and the description of a death is profound ... wish I had time to read more of your wonderful writes ... I'm making the rounds of the alphabet and there are just a bunch of wonderful writers here at the Soup!! Do I have your birth day/month for my "singing" blog? Let me know if you would like to be added to the calendar ... smile ...
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Date: 5/23/2009 8:35:00 AM
Each line draws me in, Laura.....with beauty, with the mysterious ! Almost peacefully will we go. Well done! ~ Carrie
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Date: 5/23/2009 4:45:00 AM
The title is awesome..your words had me hooked into this write..the images are so strong...blue blood...scarlet ribbons grow like hungry snakes...wow...the last three lines are incredible...I am so happy to be reading your work...excellent.
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Date: 5/23/2009 12:57:00 AM
Beautiful enigmatic dreamy words Laura nice one.especially this image 'Slowly I will descend into my shallow breath 'Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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