Raw

I cried to spy you laugh to see your ballroom choreograph shameless pleasure with a smile my heart breaking all the while a week ago we split and no way I am over it tear falls daily catch me up every time a memory hits abrupt your joy laughs at my pain and those sneers bring such distain as though we never were a we all torment surrounds the lesser me from the ooze I will connect as much of me as I recollect (raw) [a re-post circa 1991)

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Robert Lindley

Date: 9/3/2023 9:38:00 AM

Yes, my friend love can often bring on the deepest of pains. I know as it hit me several times in my youth. Such agonizing, heartfelt pain. I did however live through it and learned. This is a very fine poem hit me hard as I recollect those old wounds myself. Great poem and a new fav for me.

Arlo Parker
Date: 9/3/2023 9:45:00 PM

True love dispatched against one's will is devastating indeed. Can we survive? Of course, but just a little less of us goes on.Thx, RL. :o))

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/21/2023 7:23:00 PM

So raw..It hurts to the bone

Arlo Parker
Date: 8/22/2023 11:47:00 AM

Indeed, stripped clean. But then, hope? Anew? :o/

Jan Allison

Date: 8/3/2023 11:34:00 PM

You certainly write of painful memories. The first stanza had me picturing a jilted bloke spying on his ex at her wedding and having that first dance. hugs jan xx

Arlo Parker
Date: 8/4/2023 3:26:00 PM

Didn't take her long...a broken heart should take time to heal. Guess we know the score here. Thanks, JA. :o/