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Raspberry Ruins

In a world bejeweled with tainted trinkets, and feigned flowers, we follow the wailing waves below whirling wind, like secluded silhouettes, stranded on the cusp of chaos, unable to find the sparkling streak of hyacinth hope- between dusk and dawn. Perhaps there is a reason why I stopped rewriting runes with cashmere conclusions, as I’ve long been dreaming of dahlias, on weathered willows, oblivious to the dancing rays of rising sun swiftly cascading like caramel confetti. I am like the sleepless ocean, letting the fleeting phases of bewitching moon lure floating sapphires; pushing and pulling my insomniac tides with turquoise triggers, as the inner-child continues to sail through tumultuous seas, healing from the trauma I’ve been fed, concocted with raspberry ruins, from silver spoons, on dulcet trays. I’ve tasted poison in the fruitiest of cocktails, although the flavors of life remain a mystery within a fickle game of chess, incomplete and unattainable. I search for a sanctuary where peace lilies sprout, beneath the eclipsed horizon, blindfolding my third eye, as I waltz through astral spheres to reach an elysian dimension. Amidst unanswered questions hanging like unsolvable equations, for all that I’ve believed was but a myth concealed in illusory amulets, bruising my inner psyche, preventing me from seeing beyond. Yet the morning sky convinces me to reconsider and realign, as the whimsical breeze whispers in a soft cadence: the Universe is infinite, so am I. This pink granite heart is as vast as the spring-hills with deepest of falls, prevailing traces of my silenced voice. And when mauve clouds kissed my frail fingers, I remembered how stars do not need our touch, to unravel fate laced in citrine dust, Like how I breathe- lavender love, within me, leaving no blood in my veins but poetry- flowing as the poem of pearlescent tomorrows, through thin sangria streams, in daisy dialects. So who am I~ but a mere dot on a faceless canvas, an echo of your rosy rhymes, an incomplete verse with complex metaphors, weaving woes in sunflower silence..

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Date: 1/11/2024 8:53:00 PM
neat adjectives! :O
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Date: 1/1/2024 4:10:00 AM
We may not be anything important to the world, but we are important to at least one person in this world and usually more than just one person. I enjoyed reading this one today. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 12/30/2023 11:55:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your Contest win, dear Ink. Best wishes for a Happy and Prosperous New Year
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Date: 12/30/2023 10:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest with this wonderfully weaved poem...
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Date: 12/30/2023 2:10:00 AM
A brilliant write! Congrats on a trophy win.
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Date: 12/30/2023 2:01:00 AM
So much to ponder, Ink. "So who am I~ but a mere dot on a faceless canvas, an echo of your rosy rhymes, an incomplete verse with complex metaphors, weaving woes in sunflower silence.." priceless. Congratulations on your win dearest poetess! Happy New to you--a privilege to know you. Peace & Love ~Anaya
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Date: 12/29/2023 9:53:00 PM
Wow! Stellar poetry! I extremely love reading every line from beginning to end . Our inner child continues to play - an absolute truth you've beautifully expressed in your exquisite write. Big Congrats on your win my dear poet friend Ink! Thanks for sharing! I wish you all the best this coming new year. Happy New Year dear! Hugs
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Date: 12/29/2023 7:34:00 PM
Beautiful dear... Congratulations...
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Date: 12/27/2023 7:05:00 PM
Beautiful... so many wishes for you along the way- a gift to read.
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Date: 12/25/2023 10:34:00 AM
Uff, this is breathtaking dear Ink.. from opening till the ending, it took us readers on a journey. A roller coaster of emotions we all went through while reading.. your metaphors just hit so deep! So many beautiful emotive alliterations I noticed.. feigned flowers, rosy rhymes, lavender love (I also think always love is lavender shaded hehe).. I think I can't even describe the depth of raw beauty this poem has.. just loved this self-reflective yet confessional poetic expression!
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Date: 12/25/2023 9:56:00 AM
Amazing I should post mine now looks nothing like this one. Merry Christmas, dear
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/27/2023 9:47:00 AM
Thanks for the heads up on my title for the entry although I sincerely doubt I have a chance of winning.
Date: 12/25/2023 3:57:00 AM
I can only stand aghast in awe and wonder. Another stunning masterpiece ! This is for reading again and again. So I am saving it to my FAVE. Empress, how can one write every line worth quoting . How brilliantly you are unraveling the mysterious enigma called life. I am going to be very brief as my whole family is at home for Christmas. You are simply incredible. From the opening lines from first to last... from tainted trinkets and feigned flowers, life's hollowness and affectation, you have been enumerating! "So who am I~ but a mere dot on a faceless canvas, an echo of your rosy rhymes, an incomplete verse with complex metaphors, weaving woes in is sunflower silence.."! This conclusion once again affirms the hollowness and inconsequentiality of life. Hats off dear gifted one.
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Date: 12/24/2023 2:36:00 AM
Beautiful the way your improvisation works healing and encouragement. Your InnerChild toys are words and yes, they all continue to play, because we’ve come to do God’s play here on Earth. Hugs to Maldives. ??
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Date: 12/23/2023 8:15:00 PM
This is a grandest of poems, and of intuitive magic. I loved the insights it contained.
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Date: 12/23/2023 7:22:00 PM
They say no matter how old we get we always envision that little child within us, and thank God we do, for that is the part of us that never dies dear friend, eloquently written gl in the contest,
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Date: 12/23/2023 7:20:00 PM
Wooow!! That ending is truly phenomenally powerful!! Such a profound and poignant wrap! I’m so in awe my beautiful soul sis..the way you connect your emotions and thoughts into words so flawlessly, divinely delicate yet exuding such strength and resilience! You are truly a goddess and your strength is truly unmatched! I am so in awe of your way with words..weaving poetry so artistically mesmeric, swimming in the imagery, feeling your words..I wish I could quote so many of your lines, but I would take up most of
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Fading Star Silence
Date: 12/23/2023 7:21:00 PM
the comment section doing so..Your words truly resound! I’m awestruck as always by you, my beautiful soul sis! You are the truest meaning of living art, in that brilliant mind heart and soul of yours!
Date: 12/23/2023 5:15:00 PM
this is a marvelous creation, Ink! It was filled with so many images that evoked strong emotions in me. You've definitely addressed the contest prompt. The ending grabbed my heart...'thoughts and beliefs are fickle, how little we know..yet come what may, our inner child continues to play" At our core, lives our inner child, our true selves. Have a splendid evening, Sara
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Date: 12/23/2023 3:00:00 PM
So who am I~ but a mere dot on a faceless canvas, an echo of your rosy rhymes, an incomplete verse with complex metaphors, weaving woes in sunflower silence--splendid conclusion of your brilliant poem, Ink.
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Date: 12/23/2023 12:41:00 PM
Reading this just after my stress time at the airport made me really elated. "Amidst unanswered questions hanging like unsolvable equations" I loved every word here. You are indeed your name Empress, Ink forever filled. Creatives have their 3rd eyes open I believe.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/24/2023 12:02:00 PM
Hi Tonye
Date: 12/23/2023 10:36:00 AM
Dear Ink, I experienced a profound sense of emotion while engaging with the complexity of your writing, feeling an array of deep self-reflection. You adeptly explore the profound intricacies of human existence, delving into the essence of our beings. The use of the metaphor of smelling lavender love and having poetry flow through our veins instead of blood adds a transcendent and ethereal quality to the conclusion of your work. Your poem is an exceptional creation, from start to finish.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/24/2023 12:03:00 PM
I'll keep my blood but thx
Date: 12/23/2023 9:06:00 AM
Damn these lines papi!!!! Soooo many of them just so elegantly architected !! I am like the raging ocean, letting the fleeting phases of bewitching moon… search for a sanctuary where peace lilies sprout, beneath the eclipsed horizon, whimsical breeze whispers in a soft cadence the Universe is infinite, so am I… mmm..that hit different… soo heavily gorgeous! mere dot on a faceless canvas.. incomplete verse with complex metaphors, weaving woes in sunflower silence.. freaking genius craft of art!!!
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Date: 12/23/2023 6:09:00 AM
So many good lines and thoughts here. Stanza 4 is my fave, but I especially like this thought: "Yet the morning sky convinces me to reconsider and realign..." I think we can all relate to the hope of a new day, new beginnings, new paradigms forming in our hearts and minds. There's an old saying, "Change your mind, change your life." It's tempting to enter this contest but I probably won't. I've often contemplated to myself, who am I really at my core? Very Nice Inkstress
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Ayesha Iqbal
Date: 12/25/2023 10:41:00 AM
Oh yes I can totally relate.. as this is the hardest for me to decide too, who am I at my core really? I think it's a blessing to have that clear honest vision.. Ink did very well as always.. we can sense the truth from her pieces. Best of luck dear Ink!!
Date: 12/23/2023 5:21:00 AM
Dear inky, wow and gosh, there are more metaphors in your poem than in existence, I reckon.. This is a poetic journey through introspection, disillusionment, yearning, and self-discovery. The use of metaphors, vivid imagery, and thoughtful reflections create a rich and immersive reading experience, inviting readers to reflect on their own complexities within the larger context of the universe... The opening lines set the tone with the metaphor of a world "bejeweled
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/24/2023 12:02:00 PM
I'm feeling the cosmic interconnectedness big time
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Silent One
Date: 12/23/2023 5:23:00 AM
The imagery of mauve clouds kissing frail fingers and the remembrance of stars not needing our touch beautifully conveys a sense of cosmic interconnectedness. The speaker's identity is portrayed as a mere dot on a faceless canvas, yet an echo of rosy rhymes and an incomplete verse with complex metaphors. The metaphor of breathing lavender love and having poetry flow in place of blood in the veins adds a sublime and ethereal quality to the conclusion... This will be a top winner for sure...
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Silent One
Date: 12/23/2023 5:22:00 AM
with tainted trinkets" and "feigned flowers," suggesting a sense of disillusionment or a recognition of the superficiality in the world. The portrayal of following "wailing waves" and feeling like "secluded silhouettes" conveys a poignant sense of isolation and disorientation amidst chaos... The poem takes a turn towards optimism with the morning sky convincing the writer to reconsider and realign. The metaphor of the Universe being infinite, just like the speaker, introduces a theme of self-realization and cosmic connection. The pink granite heart as vast as spring hills with deepest falls becomes a powerful symbol of resilience and expansiveness...
Date: 12/23/2023 4:54:00 AM
My goodness, this is such a magnificent poem, dear Ink.I could really feel those emotions of darkness and self-introspection,whirling through these words that have woven themselves in such a profound way to convey the deep layers of realities that actually define one's cores.Where contrasts of rage and peace, reside in the 'pink granite heart' and where the soul has tasted the poison of betrayals, turning towards one's own self for resilience and power..somehow,this resonated with me, truthfully
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/23/2023 5:00:00 AM
"the trauma I’ve been fed, concocted with raspberry ruins, from silver spoons, on dulcet trays" I've seen most of the times trauma comes from familiar faces when we least expect it.. I get such soul stirring vibes from this poem.. It's so poignant, enriched with metaphors, alliteration and adjectives, whilst flowing so fluently throughout. The highlight of this poem for me was the ending.. "So who am I~but a mere dot on a faceless canvas,an echo of your rosy rhymes,an incomplete verse with complex metaphors weaving woes in sunflower silence.." Simply WOW.. This is a FAV for me.. Keep shining and writing, my dear Fairy Goddess, best of luck to you for the contest :)
Date: 12/23/2023 4:28:00 AM
Long enough … great alliterations… beautiful piece .
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/23/2023 4:32:00 AM
Lolol

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