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*** I dedicate this poem to all selfless single mothers... =`)

I want to acknowledge, Dan Cwiak for his poem ORIENTAL LOVE RHAPSODY, his poem inspired the free verse of this poem... =`)

PARALLEL AUTUMN SURPRISES A ferris wheel of no return, she stood with rosy cheeks so fair; both day and night just wide rocky bridges of light and dark. All she needed was bulb of fresh start.. Three months pass after the love explosion happened, her pillar of strength taken for independence sake. Only candles of hope she has; slowly, slowly losing its glow. Her eyes were a train flood of crystal tears. Her heart jailed from loss but needed to be freed for the sake of a budding life. She opens her door day by day beaming a sunshine in her face. Her chest-buds bloom so graceful. Her tummy grows a robust breathing sphere. Parallel autumn surprises bring her to a sandwich salad showcase. A year passed, in a fragrant natural lair with the light bowing down on them, she planted a kiss on her baby's lips. Hush... to ... rush... Hush... to ... rush... Teardrops held long tumble thunder listless from her eyes of rest and quiet yet, her steady voice whispers a storm... Head... to ... toe Head... to ... toe Forlorn rose maiden exhaled- cyclic shudders: wells of regret like a ruined garden where blossoms frown, green leaves too, turned brown. Sun... to... rain... Sun... to... rain... Her life blossomed amidst earthquake break of failures, true love she finally receive-- it pardoned her wrongs. Sighs... to... groans... Sighs... to... groans... Bright twinkling stars tended safe the narrow path as silhouetted liquid moon cajoles her long bittersweet escape. Kiss... to ... freedom... Kiss... to ... freedom... Her heartstrings strum endless: her abounding joy! Upon hopeful eyes mirror, the sparkles of her infants tears... ______________________________________________________________________ ***Haibun Freestyle 08:34 pm, November 24, 2015

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/24/2015 10:55:00 AM

Congrats on your winner..Sara

Michael Tor

Date: 12/21/2015 7:33:00 AM

Olive very touching write congratulations on your win!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/20/2015 7:21:00 PM

Olive, Congrats on your Haibun Free-Style win. ~LINDA~

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 12/20/2015 12:00:00 PM

Thank you Olive for entering my contest, and writing a Haibun FreeStyle. Great imagery, and the tenderness shines through in every line.

Skat A

Date: 12/20/2015 11:10:00 AM

OLIVE, Congratulations on your Haibun Free-Styled win. WUV **SKAT**

Robert Lindley

Date: 11/28/2015 12:51:00 PM

A wondrously written piece my friend! Amazing message,flow and inspiration ! Super 7....

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/27/2015 6:37:00 PM

A work to be proud of Olive! Dan's stye fits these words perfectly

James Fraser

Date: 11/27/2015 3:56:00 PM

Taken, to never forsaken is this sad to beautiful poem. This is so powerful in weep, but allows the spirit of decency and want to caress the lives of two whom should never be parted. It's another Gem from a growing pen Olive. Reading such lovely writes fills my heart with joy, for soon we'll be writing together, inches apart, not 8000 miles ~~ hugs from your James xx~~xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/9/2015 6:47:00 AM

Thanks much James.. =`) I am glad you like my poem.. =`) Yes soon, we will together side by side.. =`)

Paul Callus

Date: 11/27/2015 12:50:00 PM

Such a heartfelt, excellent poem, Olive_eloi! From a sad loss to gain and joy, written with emotive poetic words. Well done! Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/7/2015 2:44:00 AM

Thanks much Paul. =`) I am glad that you like my poem.. =`) it's from the depths of my mind plus some inspirations.. =`) hugs too! ~O.E.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/25/2015 7:18:00 AM

Interesting work..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/1/2015 6:08:00 PM

thank you so much Sara... =`)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/24/2015 1:45:00 PM

- Beautiful and sweet, dear Olive :) - Love it - (7) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/25/2015 6:06:00 AM

Thanks much Anne Lise.. =`) hugs back..

Dan Cwiak

Date: 11/24/2015 10:19:00 AM

Olive, you have made the words come alive on the page. I am truly humbled that you could write such beautiful and sensitive words as these as a responsorial poem to my poor words. Thank you. HUGS// On a scale of 7, this is a 10.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/24/2015 9:50:00 PM

Thanks much Dan, I am waiting for maybe a better time to post my response to your poem here, Ive taken longer than I thought.. =`) thanks much for this wonderful comment.. =`)~Olive Eloisa

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/24/2015 7:53:00 AM

painted a with bold and daring brush... very solid write, dear eloi... greeeat!..huggs

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/24/2015 7:54:00 PM

thanks much Nette.. =`) I appreciate your beautiful encouraging comment.. =`)