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One Dark Moment

I am lost in my mind steeped in dark emotion. Shadows block the light from my eyes and all I see is the blackness of pain which holds my heart captive again. Swift flow my silver tears and burn my skin in trails.

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Lawrence Ingle

Date: 11/16/2009 9:37:00 PM

Now that is one that I hope doesn't keep making you hurt inside. But if you're like me, sometimes I can read one of my past written poems and they will bring a few tears to my eyes all over again and again, just like yours just did...keep up the great writing dear...I love it...friends in poetry...lawrence ingle in lou. ky.

Arany P.

Date: 2/21/2009 4:47:00 AM

ooo! the emotion you have filled the reader with plenty!! Robin, you inspire me... thank you for that! ~ Arany

Maryam Jameela Haniff

Date: 2/20/2009 12:54:00 PM

this is so great..filled with so much expression and feeling...whatever type of poem it is, doesn't matter to u ....u just do it in a wink as always...love*/*Maryam

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/20/2009 6:23:00 AM

Ferciuos friend, Mother of Nations, fear not, the road fills with adventure, break free from mindset failed, emerge to brave the gale, let laughter fill your ears; go beyond the pale. Love & Light Debbie

John Rhinem

Date: 2/19/2009 6:33:00 PM

Such a profound expression of ones saddened moments within their life~which in your case dear lady, hopefully shall be merely but a passing wind~here today and gone tomorrow!!! I sincerely hope that you are doing wonderfully tonight my blessed and gifted friend, "Priceless Robin!!?"~For I truly dislike, to ever see your precious heart suffer, within any way dear lady!!!? My Love & Warmth To You & Your Loves Always, John!":)

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 2/19/2009 11:36:00 AM

I've not seen this form before, but you have done a wonderful job with it! Very heartfelt, sad and lonely. I was pulled into my own sorrows for a moment. Very well written! ~Trudy~

John Loving Iii

Date: 2/19/2009 10:15:00 AM

the wave of depression. i know it well. john

Brian Strand

Date: 2/19/2009 9:01:00 AM

Excellent phrasing Robin and memorable imagery expecially L7.Rgds Brian

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 2/19/2009 4:48:00 AM

While the form is outstanding, the read itself is very introspective and sad. I sure hope this is fiction. Beautiful writing however. Michael

Laurie Ginn

Date: 2/18/2009 8:42:00 PM

It amazes me how you guys fit your heart and words into a form, that's talent. Nice work Robin. loveudo, Laurie

Carrie Richards

Date: 2/18/2009 5:46:00 PM

Wow, Robin. This is one of the deepest and best you have written, I think! So solemn, so sad, so well done! ~ Carrie

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/18/2009 4:20:00 PM

Robin, please step out of the "shadows." I love the way you shine! Interesting verse form; I see I can learn a lot from you, and I am trying to experiment. Thanks for your thoughts on "Feline Survivor." She's brought me such great joy. Love, Carolyn

Michael Jordan

Date: 2/18/2009 3:23:00 PM

Robin great expression of emotion with-in this poem - very well written piece - God Bless, MJ

Donna Golden

Date: 2/18/2009 3:09:00 PM

Vivid, emotional write, here, Robin. Also, you've used a form that I've not heard of before now. I loved the line, "Swift flow my silver tears". This is just very well written. Hugs, Donna G.

Raul Moreno

Date: 2/18/2009 2:36:00 PM

I have related to this in the past, great write Robin and nice choice of form, it's always nice to see something different...Raul

Malcolm Dyer

Date: 2/18/2009 2:13:00 PM

dark probing and we writen I really enjoyed this piece

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 2/18/2009 2:02:00 PM

Well this is a style I've not yet seen on the soup but I like it ! Deep emotion in your words! Laura :)

Christopher Higgins

Date: 2/18/2009 1:47:00 PM

This is awesome Robin..the form is totally new to me..you have written this piece very well. Chris.