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Old Man

He remains stalwart, though his eyes be dim tales of the sea define him, some grim his face etched like a weathered map, a compass pointing between light and shadows, thin. A broken nose belies his youth, most zealous once brash and bold, defiant and rebellious his black hair, bright eyes and jawline, strong now tempered with white beard, grays and yellows. His past has logged a journal of high adventures stormy life, lost loves, foolishness and treasures he navigates his emotions with a stoic demeanor yet his telling face and eyes reveal more than ever. Written on 6/7/2022

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Date: 7/16/2022 1:08:00 PM
Laura, congratulations on your win. You have captured the complete human experience of this man - life and loss. Blessings!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/17/2022 6:10:00 AM
Thank you, Sam. So happy you liked this one! :)
Date: 7/16/2022 5:35:00 AM
Laura, I love how you dig deep in this poem to understand the man of my painting. It's wonderful to see how others relate to one's art. This I especially like: "His past has logged a journal of high adventures stormy life, lost loves, foolishness and treasures he navigates his emotions with a stoic demeanor yet his telling face and eyes reveal more than ever. " Terrilynn, TravelingArtista
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/16/2022 6:47:00 AM
I am honored to know that the artist of this fine portrait liked my poetic take on it! I truly enjoyed thinking up a history behind his face. My husband and I own a sailboat, so a lot of my ideas came from our love of the sea. Thank you for taking the time to comment, Terrilynn! :)
Date: 7/12/2022 11:25:00 PM
The sailor angle to the old man and poetry was rather nice....I loved it and Congrats on your win Laura :)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/13/2022 12:51:00 PM
Thank you, Carol. I’m glad you liked this one. :)
Date: 7/12/2022 6:16:00 PM
Laura, I really like how you used the maritime imagery to describe the old sailor - weathered map, compass, logged a journal, stormy life, navigates his emotions. You paint with words the adventurous yet tumultuous life with dignity and respect for the soul behind the weathered face. So glad I visited this today... congrats on your contest win! Hugs ~ John
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/12/2022 7:44:00 PM
Thank you, John! I appreciate your thoughtful comments and am happy you enjoyed this one! :)
Date: 7/12/2022 6:04:00 PM
I believe you have captured his soul in this wonderfully expressive poem Laura. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Blessings xxoo
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/12/2022 7:44:00 PM
Thank you, sweet Connie! Glad you liked this one! :)
Date: 6/23/2022 8:09:00 PM
Great story telling. Thanks for your visit and kind comment on my poem. ;0)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/24/2022 6:12:00 PM
Thank you, Richard! :)
Date: 6/21/2022 2:22:00 PM
Well researched! Great imagery! Be blessed, Laura!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/22/2022 9:03:00 AM
Thank you, Kim! :)
Date: 6/18/2022 7:53:00 AM
Wonderful imagery, Laura. Happy Belated Birthday! Thanks for the lovely Rhyme. Bill
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/20/2022 5:34:00 AM
Thank you, Bill! I’m glad you liked this one! :)
Date: 6/15/2022 9:44:00 PM
Well from this old man, Laura, Your observation and detail are wonderfully poetic. Loved every word.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/17/2022 2:24:00 PM
Thank you, Harry! I’m so glad you liked this one! :)
Date: 6/12/2022 2:19:00 AM
A lovely tale of a old man of the sea, his picture becomes visual in the words I see… Belle
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/12/2022 5:57:00 AM
So happy you liked it one, Belle! Thank you! :)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/12/2022 5:52:00 AM
So happy you liked it one, Belle! Thank you! :)
Date: 6/11/2022 6:59:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this... Meanwhile, a blessed belated birthday to you. This is my prayer for you based on Numbers 6:24-26 of the Bible: "The LORD bless thee, and keep thee: The LORD make his face shine upon thee, and be gracious unto thee: The LORD lift up his countenance upon thee, and give thee peace." God bless you.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/11/2022 8:23:00 PM
Thank you for the blessings from God’s Word, Beata! I am grateful for my 65 years on this earth! :)
Date: 6/10/2022 9:00:00 PM
This is so vivid, Laura, I can see the years of adventures and trials, sounds like he is a holder of many secrets~
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/11/2022 6:39:00 AM
Thank you, Michelle! I’m glad you liked this one…I wanted to make a portrait come alive.
Date: 6/7/2022 11:47:00 AM
Nice one, Laura! Aloha!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/7/2022 11:49:00 AM
Thanks, Rico!

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