Ocular Floaters

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Vacant but for minute shadows, I’d mistaken for clouds our sky has lied again; it is only blue; chastely blue. No longer do you wait secretly behind celestial skeins of dust. You are only in my eyes. ©Kathryn McLoughlin Collins September 16, 20012

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Stephen Kilmer

Date: 11/27/2013 7:36:00 PM

I am sorry that I have not taken the time to read your poetry. This is beyond brilliant. I am sad, yet optimistic. Your words bring me closer to a truth that is only human. Thank you. ~Kilmer

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/22/2012 9:28:00 PM

Oh my good one..always nice to read fresh metaphor! [I have those things floaters like small fish-hooks in my eyes!] The last line wraps it up very well! Light & Love

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 10/10/2012 10:46:00 AM

'...chastely blue,' '...celestial skeins of dust,' (my favourite!) Excellent phrasing and images... you are truly one of a kind!! (and deserve a helluva lot more reviews!!!) Love, Keith

Joann Grisetti

Date: 9/22/2012 6:47:00 PM

Beuatiful. I have these floaters, but could never have described them like this.

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/19/2012 9:52:00 AM

Incredibly sad and deep, and yet so beautiful. I love how you fit so much into just 13 lines! Hope you are well, enjoying autumn.... must fly, daughter has gone bonky! xox cyndi

Terry O'Leary

Date: 9/16/2012 10:49:00 AM

Very beautiful image! Terry