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March 6, 2024
Placed 1st: Time Poetry Contest by Ink Empress

Painting dream-scapes upon canvas of vermilion skies, O, time! how you elevate my dawn in periwinkle sunrise, As day’s footprints, glistening amber tapestries rise, When rhythms of birds, with musical winds harmonize. O, immortal aura of time! has anyone ever seen you? Spectacular at birth: wasn’t the big-bang your debut? What your omnipresence looks like, I have nary a clue, Ruling my existence, as seamlessly you pass through. Mockery of love you make, fading it over your domain, Hurting hearts once enamored, feeling pain of your reign, O, time! you changed me~ who I was, I’m not the same, Robbing my vigor as I age, sadly my exuberance you tame. You transform themes of now, into dreams of morrow, Planting seeds of hope, healing my wounds of sorrow, As through your wintry woes rise, avid spring meadows, Shining motifs of today, glinting yesterday’s shadows. Moments you take, as earth rotates, turning into days, Yearning for infinity as you traverse into eternal haze; Audaciously presupposing your empire shall never end, As ceaselessly through heaven and earth you transcend.

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Bill Baker

Date: 3/25/2024 6:52:00 AM

A lovely Personification poem, Vijay. I see congratulations are in order, my friend. You've explained time and her influence in a beautifully poetic way. Thanks for sharing your gift with us. Bill

Josefina Costales

Date: 3/9/2024 3:40:00 PM

This is lovely personification of time, its importance to our lives, not to disregard it as we ought to live sensibly by it. This is such a precious and romantic take on time...J

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:41:00 AM

Much appreciate Josefina--many thanks.

Christina Bowring

Date: 3/9/2024 3:37:00 PM

Dear Vijay, many congratulations with your very worthy win. This is a magnificent poem that captures time and its effects so beautifully and exquisitely. It’s such a captivating read with so many wonderful poetic lines. ‘ Robbing my vigor as I age, sadly my exuberance you tame’ many will relate to. A very reflective read. So enjoyed it dear Vijay. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:41:00 AM

So very kind of you Christina. I visited your page looking for a new poem--perhaps one is on the way. Much appreciate you stopping by--many thanks.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/9/2024 7:24:00 AM

Vijay, your vivid descriptions have captured the essence of time--that intangible force we're blessed with. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:41:00 AM

Thank you Janice--much appreciate.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 3/8/2024 10:09:00 PM

Vijay, your poem on time is cloaked in elegance and wonder. It is in my faves. Congratulations on your win. :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:39:00 AM

You are so very kind, my friend. Your thoughtful remarks and your FAVE are much appreciated, Evelyn--many thanks.

Karen Jones

Date: 3/8/2024 9:48:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:38:00 AM

Thank you Karen--much appreciate.

Joseph May

Date: 3/8/2024 2:22:00 PM

Time's empire is eternal, Well crafted Vijay, I enjoyed the read

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:38:00 AM

Much appreciate--many thanks, Joseph.

Ink Empress

Date: 3/8/2024 10:06:00 AM

Dear Vijay, this is a beautiful ode to time, so well crafted with not just evocative thoughts that resonate, but such artistic lines so creatively crafted, i love the imagery and flow of your lines, especially the opening lines truly drew me in. So captivating and soulfully moving! Vermilion skies to periwinkle sunrise, left me breathless! I also love your rhymes and the cadence of your poem, you always leave me in awe and this is another one that is truly worthy of a fave and first place! “ O, time! you changed me~ who I was, I’m not the same, Robbing my vigor as I age, sadly my exuberance you tame.” just love that! And every word woven here! Congratulations on your well deserved win! Thank you for writing!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:37:00 AM

Thank you for sponsoring contest, Ink. I know it is not easy. Your thoughtful feedback is always appreciated, my friend. I am honored by your FAVE and your supportive comments.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/7/2024 6:47:00 AM

A lovely write that will surely rise up on the winner’s list! Each verse sublime! Enters with painting dreamscapes then beats with audaciously presupposing…A fave, Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:35:00 AM

Honored by your FAVE, my friend. Much appreciate your thoughts, Kim--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 3/6/2024 7:19:00 PM

Like wind sweeping across a canvas, time moves that quickly. Moments turn into days and then, months change into years. This happens in the twinkling of an eye. Time is precious, indeed ! We should cherish each and every moment given. My best to you, Vijay. Hugs, Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:34:00 AM

Yes indeed--it is precious. Much appreciate, my friend. Thank you for being there. Hugs to you as well.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/6/2024 4:55:00 PM

you've meticulously and beautifully captured the complex nature and concept of time and its impact on us. I liked 'was the big bang your debut? Your poem is thought provoking and deep. Best wishes with the contest...have a pleasant evening, Sara

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:33:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback Sara--many thanks.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 3/6/2024 3:59:00 PM

Vijay. I think your poem describes what we're dealing with very thoroughly. Time has a huge impact on everything and we're certainly stuck with its passage and the effects that come with it.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:33:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit and comments, Duke--many thanks.

Joe Dimino

Date: 3/6/2024 3:08:00 PM

"Mockery of love you make, fading it over your domain, Hurting hearts once enamored, feeling pain of your reign," Wonderful, honest, heartfelt read. It cannot be explained...if relying solely on surface ministers and gut experience. Blessings my friend. Thoughtful and deep. Good luck in contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:32:00 AM

So very kind of you Joe. Many thanks, my friend.

Tom Woody

Date: 3/6/2024 2:30:00 PM

A nice entry for the contest Veej. What is time, really? Who knows. It exists. My fave line is line 2. I know inky is gonna love that periwinkle sunrise

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:32:00 AM

Thank you Tom--much appreciate.

Silent One

Date: 3/6/2024 12:31:00 PM

In your poem, Time is personified as a powerful force that shapes human experiences and emotions. The poet uses metaphorical language to depict time's influence on love, growth, and the passage of seasons, adding layers of meaning to the poem's imagery... It rhymes and flows really well.. for me, personification is different, but we all have our own interpretation of things.. Best of luck in the contest..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:32:00 AM

Much appreciate your insights my friend. Many thanks, SO.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/6/2024 12:27:00 PM

Creative way to go with this. Time does take its toll on us no matter how good or bad our life may be. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:31:00 AM

Many thanks Sara--much appreciate.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/6/2024 11:16:00 AM

Dear Vijay, Your poems is quite a captivating ode to the enigmatic nature of time and its profound influence on our lives. Through your lyrical language, you skillfully convey the multifaceted essence of time, from its celestial origins to its transformative power over love, life, and existence. Your words evoke introspection, inviting me the reader to contemplate the fleeting yet eternal nature of time. It is a beautifully crafted piece with the universal experience of grappling with the passage of time. - Blessings, Daniel

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:31:00 AM

Thoughtful feedback, as always, Daniel. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/6/2024 10:58:00 AM

Excellent poem, Vijay, explores the deep influence of time on human life, delving into its impact on emotions and experiences, while also highlighting its eternal quality. Your use of vivid and descriptive language such as "canvas of vermilion skies" and "rhythms of birds, with musical winds harmonize" creates captivating imagery. The poem skillfully incorporates personification in phrases like "time! How you elevate my dawn" and "mockery of love you make," Best Wishes for the contest

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:30:00 AM

Thank you my friend. You always spend the time to share your insights in a meaningful way. Much appreciate!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/6/2024 9:14:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "O, Time" write/ending. "Good Luck" Looks like we both did time. Have a wonderful spring day.........................

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:29:00 AM

Thank you Paula--much appreciate your visit and comments.

Jay Narain

Date: 3/6/2024 9:03:00 AM

Excellent portrayal of time and its journey in our lives. Beautifully done.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:28:00 AM

Glad you stopped by, Jay. Many thanks--much appreciate.

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/6/2024 8:55:00 AM

Excellent Vijay. I felt myself swaying through time, like a dance through your poem :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:28:00 AM

Much appreciate my friend. Many thanks, Heidi.