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This poem was inspired by an Avatar photo I recently found on PS.

Beyond the skills of escorts and the appeal of other playthings, smolders the need of the soul infused to best every man. Twelve years have taken the scars out of the memories, from the last time I was up and through just to come down and out to find every fairy tale extends it’s hand to some tragedy. The odds don’t warrant the time of practical effort. Too keen to the liabilities, always calculating ends. It is not the demands of over or having to start something new rather, better to remain alone than to be let down again. But now I see you, and it makes me pause so still, with the whisper -- Are you sure? Falls into a deafening singularity forbidding even a scream, it’s escape. I sit and can only see the touch of Heaven reaching across the Caribbean to color your face. As your smile holds the songs of every dawn’s temptress, under the soft disposition of your eyes rests a divine spirit’s symmetry, smoothing features while lensing each strand the perfect frame. That once moved a favored King to murder a man, only to bring the sword into his own house. Enabled an army to take a strong city with just one horse. And enslaved the envy of Venus to sharpen leaden arrows, but fury slipped her hands and bled her wrists out. Blood clotted on the cold muck of her grave, a suffocating cocoon. Immersed the viewer becomes, and timeless the window of the heart that is God’s craft, denying the deceiver’s forgery of any singed carnality. As if proximity has been given within the mist of your perfume, in just this one picture of your face.

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Date: 6/2/2016 12:54:00 AM
This is really amazing, Rob, that you can write such a beautiful poem from seeing a small picture of someone. I'm always impressed with your skill and your kindness.
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Date: 5/14/2016 9:13:00 AM
Now I'm intrigued...wondering what avatar inspired this beautiful poem Rob! Somewhat enlightened by the comments of yours which I read further down. Well done! #7 // paul
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Date: 4/30/2016 2:52:00 PM
Lovely and so precised to the heart with a very good linking understanding to the mind. A definite 7
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Date: 4/24/2016 5:36:00 PM
I really enjoyed this poem, sometimes the words just resonate so well with my own thoughts, I especially liked the lines "reaching across the Caribbean to color your face."
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Date: 4/16/2016 1:02:00 AM
WOW>.. PD///
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Date: 4/2/2016 3:39:00 AM
Well deigned one. I enjoyed. "a strong city with just one horse" is very impressive.
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Date: 3/29/2016 11:34:00 PM
An excellent poem, Rob... While reading this I could almost picture an artist studying his inspiration as he paints... Beautifully penned!
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Date: 3/20/2016 11:45:00 PM
Wow...how beautiful to be so inspired, Rob. That's quite the tribute write. Amazing. I wish I had seen the Avatar you are writing of. Great write. Thanks for your visit to my work. I was late in my response, but have left a comment on yours. Blessings.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 3/23/2016 9:12:00 PM
Thank you Eileen for reading & commenting. Have a great time in Malta. See you when you get back. God Bless.
Date: 3/17/2016 6:38:00 PM
Rob, just read your reply to me below here. It sounds like you know a lot about photography!!!
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Date: 3/17/2016 7:16:00 PM
I will have to investigate photography more, that would be interesting, similar to what I did for that Black and White photography contest Plato did here before he left. I think that poem was 'Exposing the Soul".
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Date: 3/17/2016 7:14:00 PM
I once dated a woman that was into photography, but the terms below are astronomical terms. Gravitational Lensing, mass bending light. I was using this to describe how her hair lays or was laid around her face. And the singularity of the face, like the pull of a black hole in space. The power and effects, etc.
Date: 3/12/2016 6:04:00 PM
I haven't seen the picture bu this sure is a vivid recreation. Your phrasing, '...the soft disposition of your eyes,' '...a divine spirits's symmetry,' simply divine! Well done Rob. Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 3/16/2016 5:26:00 PM
Thanks Keith. I appreciate you being one of my most consistent readers. God Bless.
Date: 3/11/2016 10:42:00 PM
oh WAIT, now I remember!!! It's the picture that I had commented on and that you liked so much. Wow, what a compliment to Nayda!!
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Date: 3/11/2016 10:39:00 PM
Rob, wow, this is some amazing poetry. of course, you know me, i don't quite "get it" but this one part here: it really got me: I sit and can only see the touch of Heaven reaching across the Caribbean to color your face. (that is so beautiful) Also I loved the second half of this poem. The imagery so wonderful!
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Date: 3/12/2016 10:54:00 AM
The singularity and lensing used in the poem was in the gravitational sense, the effect of black holes in space. Those forces and effects matched the intensity of the draw of the avatar. Thank you for your compliments.
Date: 3/11/2016 6:59:00 PM
Rob, this is BEAUTIFUL and so well written, 7 ~
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Date: 3/12/2016 10:48:00 AM
Thanks Constance.
Date: 3/9/2016 9:50:00 AM
I feel very honored with this poem Rob.
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Date: 3/9/2016 12:27:00 PM
Thank you Nayda for that inspirational avatar. It is a very profound and powerful photo. It stayed with me after I first saw it, and several days later, I started to write about it. I am glad you like the end result. God Bless You.
Date: 3/9/2016 4:55:00 AM
wow, rob... a most appealing melody; your words find their place in things mystical!..huggs
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Date: 3/9/2016 12:24:00 PM
'Wow' is what it was like when I first saw the avatar. Thank you Nette for reading and commenting on this poem. Hugs back to you 10 fold.

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