Monsters

Monsters sometimes find a way of getting out Even when you thought they were locked away Someone must have found the key you threw out What do you do when it's one of you Standing, watching blood dripping from hand Where it came from I could not tell you ~ never tell I should never tell ~ no, not against one of us Though I watch the monsters dancing off the wall Look, their voices scatter across the room Colored pills of many spilled onto the floor I hear sirens screaming, coming closer still Should I stand here ~ and wait to let them in Should I run to hide myself from within No, I couldn't let it happen, no, not again I hear them knocking on my door ~ ~ POLICE ~ ~ totally made up, 2/ 8/ 2013 11 pm WED

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Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/17/2013 6:05:00 PM

I can really relate to the first verse of this poem. I have those "monsters" locked inside of me, and somehow they do get out occasionally! They tend to show themselves in my poetry, which I find helps to quiet them down for awhile. Great work on this poem, Debbie, I liked it very much!...Thank you for the kind comments!

Alexis Pond

Date: 6/26/2013 4:40:00 PM

This work I liked very much, the metaphors and the twists as the piece progresses, a little dark but then again I like dark. Good work, Thumbs Up!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 6/27/2013 12:48:00 AM

Thank you ;}

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/12/2013 11:57:00 PM

This was very disturbing and made me think of a lunatic that sees hallucinations. You worded it in such a way to make me feel the anxiety of the psycho... a glimpse of his inner thoughts. And that one last word was like reality sinking in... great work!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 6/13/2013 12:10:00 AM

Thanks Tim ;}

Rockman Pritts

Date: 6/6/2013 2:22:00 AM

This sounds like personal demons. Multiple personalities battling with each other to gain control of a single soul and willing to do whatever it takes to win or lose. Suns rise and suns set. Moons wax and wane. Yet platitude escapes the mind of one who is not sane. And the sirens signify the end to another beginning of a vicious cycle until the ones soul is released into another plane. At least that's what I got from this poem. Thanks for sharing and making me think. Rockman

Debbie Duncan
Date: 6/6/2013 3:30:00 PM

Wow, I wan't thinking that when I wrote it. ;}

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/27/2013 11:32:00 PM

Excellent. Very creative and unique write. Enjoyed. Tfs

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/29/2013 12:02:00 AM

Thank you ;}

Cherl Dunn

Date: 5/27/2013 6:16:00 PM

Nicely written and thank you for your commit.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/27/2013 8:11:00 PM

thank you Cheryl ;}

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/26/2013 2:36:00 AM

This was something else! Monsters...yes, we lock them away but they always manage to escape! I know my do! Very imaginative and trilling piece. Thanks for your visit to Dreamland's Gate and the sweet words you posted! I needed them today!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/27/2013 12:59:00 AM

Thank you for reading my words Eileen,,,,I will have to read more of your words ;}

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/26/2013 1:06:00 AM

yes, made up, but parts of it really were deep!!! Like having to do with drug addiction and stuff. Nice seeing you tonight. you are the last one and now I am out of here!!! See ya later, alligator.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/27/2013 12:48:00 AM

After while crocodile ;}

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/24/2013 5:19:00 PM

Cute one..Creative and unique work..Enjoyed reading this one..Thanks for stopping by..Sorry to hear that you had PC problems..Sara

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/27/2013 12:47:00 AM

Thank you Sara ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/24/2013 11:11:00 AM

- Debbie ..... hope it's just your imagination .... well written!! - Have a great weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/24/2013 4:19:00 PM

yes it's made up Anne ;}

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/24/2013 10:21:00 AM

i love your totally made up poetry, says alot about your imagination, also your wonderful poetry

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/23/2013 11:04:00 PM

Debbie, wow...my mind twisted in many directions... A monster a creature dancing off the wall. well I hope this horror is fiction, and the monsters in this poem, get arrested for slipping out of the box... somethings should not be reveled. It might show the true form of one... enjoyed~ Linda

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/24/2013 10:31:00 AM

Thank you PD ;}

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/23/2013 11:27:00 AM

Quite powerful verse here! Hope you have a nice day! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Colleen Bono

Date: 5/23/2013 10:19:00 AM

Just wanted to say welcome back.