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For Joseph May's Line Inspiration poetry contest.

 

When words like seeds remain uncultivated, in somber silence the poet within me dies. In the misery of my perishing poetic oasis, petal like poems refuse to infuse idealistic pigments. But without words, a midnight beast lurks in thoughts hidden behind metaphors written in psychedelic ink. My beloved is a black rose who's thorns are like blades. Her pecan lips lustfully devour my heart's purple blood, because she loves to see me bleed in musing rivers, flowing upon shores of her poetic fibres. On dark murky days her tears plunge like acid rain, melting through my shiny white knight armour. For, she is the ebony queen in my chessboard of life, in position for 'checkmate' against an ivory king. In my troubled mind, the sun is like a timid yellow umbrella, hiding behind grey ashen clouds, which in clementine hues, appear like orange smoke polluting my toxic swollen lungs. And I can't breathe without her sugar lips bringing me back to life with her special scarlet kiss. Yet, I am her willing prisoner, even in absence and distance, we remain eternally chained, as spiritual word weaving lovers, prowling and howling like wolves wandering under the blue moon. Number 4

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Date: 5/5/2024 12:34:00 PM
Silent One, seems as though you have some pretty powerful motivation from your beloved and the sun. You have an incredible way to bring the things you think of into words. A fantastic cultivator of words you are!! I am in awe at your productivity and adaptability for all the contents you participate in.
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Date: 5/5/2024 5:18:00 AM
Linked by poetry in the realm of metaphors, Very nicely done Silent, Congrats on your win
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Date: 5/4/2024 11:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your amazing write. Never thought about a chessboard of life but guess it is. Have a blessed weekend.............
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Date: 5/4/2024 10:03:00 AM
Great poem. Congrats.
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Date: 5/4/2024 6:41:00 AM
I don't want to ask how sugary her lips feel, well it brings you back to life so I can imagine the power that lies within. She's a mix of everything, cool, hot. There's always something more and new to see, which makes it very enticing. I always love love your romantic poems, as dark as I like. "Yet, I am her willing prisoner, even in absence and distance, we remain eternally chained." The perfect hurt love story Silent.
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:43:00 PM
“ my beloved is a black rose” ah! How beautiful! And unique your beloved must be, dark but fragrant, thorny yet worth it, perhaps? Very well written poem this is! I really loved josephs prompts but didnt get time to write for his contest: altho if i had to choose a prompt to write for his contest would have been so hard to pick one, as all were so good and inspiring! I wish i had the time to do it but i think you did yours very well: so touching and heartfelt! “ i am her willing prisoner “ i sense selfless love and devotion through your well articulated lines delivered in sheer eloquence! Impeccable as always with exquisite diction metaphors imagery and depth with poetic techniques used! Well done! Best wishes for the contest! Youv nailed it
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Date: 4/30/2024 5:44:00 PM
Our friend, it's good to see you again. Wonderfully, the poem delves into the nuances of love, yearning, and creative poetry. The book delves into the complex issues of love, the depths of one's feelings for one's beloved, and the bond between the two. An intricate web of feelings and images is wove together by your use of colorful and expressive words. Nouns that contain the words "petal," "bleed," "lustfully," "acid rain," "umbrella," "polluting," and "prisoner" elicit powerful feelings and vivid sensory experiences. Additionally, you utilize metaphors like the chessboard, black rose, ivory king, and ebony queen to represent the relationship's dynamics.
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Date: 4/30/2024 3:24:00 PM
Your thoughts resonate in metaphors written in psychedelic ink, SO---Excellent write adorning the prompt given, splendid use of poetic devices!
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Date: 4/30/2024 1:40:00 PM
SO this write is very deep and full of blood it is a testament of a man brought to his knees by love gl in contest hugs Shadow
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Date: 4/30/2024 5:46:00 AM
A capitvating love poem, Silent One. It's certainly a fabulous rendering for the contest. Your signature imagery captured my heart, rendering me almost speechless. Your metaphors were sublime, sincerely. I especially liked she is the ebony queen in my chessboard of life, in position for 'checkmate' against an ivory king. Well done! Best wishes with the contest, Sara
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