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Love Or Lust

Beautiful green garden is where they camp he kisses with care, like a hungry saint long plays and foreplays hidden from all lamps her heart acquires red from hormone’s paint their shower lights up the city so fast her nudity burns in his affection there’s every indication this will last his mum sees and says “that’s perfection!” The rhythm is steady and slow in love passion is just a dead leaf without lust on this time, she prays for luck from above but knowing each other more is a must weeks passed, he cares not to know her real name emotions stalled, she’s happy with this game. Published: 6/26/2020 For the Love or Lust Poetry Contest Sponsored by D.W. Rodgers Chosen form: Sonnet Placement: 4th (7/7/2020)

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Paghunda Zahid

Date: 5/3/2021 6:31:00 PM

Interesting... Beautiful imagery

Funom Makama
Date: 5/3/2021 7:59:00 PM

Thank you very much Zahid

Brian Sambourne

Date: 4/5/2021 1:07:00 PM

Beautiful expression of passion. Loved it. So well written. Best wishes, Brian

Funom Makama
Date: 4/27/2021 6:34:00 PM

Thank you so much Brian

Weston Gregory

Date: 11/11/2020 6:04:00 PM

sufficiently less, the craving invoked are just for a time it's a pity many prey upon. a timely piece and nicely written.

Funom Makama
Date: 11/14/2020 5:02:00 PM

Thank you so much Weston Gregory... This is so encouraging.

Michael Tor

Date: 11/1/2020 2:44:00 AM

Funom where have you been you havent posted in a while? Sensual piece you have created here my friend...

Funom Makama
Date: 11/14/2020 5:02:00 PM

Thank you very much, as a medical doctor, I have been very active and busy in this pandemic. I even caught the virus but I am okay now. But also I cannot find the "submit poem" feature.

Silent One

Date: 10/25/2020 1:49:00 PM

Hope you are well my brother.. long time no see

Funom Makama
Date: 11/14/2020 5:00:00 PM

Thank you so much. I have been around brother and the "submit poem" feature is no longer in my profile

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 10/14/2020 10:13:00 AM

I really enjoyed the imagery that is created through this smooth rhyming piece. Nicely done, my friend!

Funom Makama
Date: 4/27/2021 6:35:00 PM

Thank you so much Michael... I appreciate this

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/27/2020 6:59:00 AM

This is a very accurate portrayal of lust. A flame that burns brightly for a time. So well expressed.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/27/2020 2:48:00 PM

Thank you so much Ric.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/17/2020 9:00:00 PM

So interesting how lust got all played out. I really enjoyed the imagery you used to portray this scenario. Looks like it was a winner. Big congrats, and thanks for my win in your contest, sir.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/22/2020 5:46:00 PM

Thank you so much Andrea. I hope you are good and safe.

Matt Coffelt

Date: 7/13/2020 9:29:00 PM

I really enjoy this as it is lust spilled onto paper! I was inquiring if you were able to read my work especially ....YOU Have a great day

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:32:00 AM

Thank you so much MAtt, I will stop by to read your work. Your comment is amazing.

Jack Horne

Date: 7/10/2020 2:39:00 PM

beautiful & thoughtful sonnet

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:31:00 AM

I appreciate this Jack. Thank you very much

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/9/2020 11:23:00 AM

Funom, a very sensual write and a wonderful, deserved win. Great poetry. Blessings, Jennifer.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:31:00 AM

Thank you so much Jennifer Proxenos.. I really appreciate it.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/8/2020 4:36:00 PM

Congrats on your winning work. Very romantic. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:30:00 AM

Thank you so much Sara... This is encouraging and wonderful

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 7/7/2020 8:59:00 PM

Congrats Funom, an elegant sonnet with a lovely ambivalent tone.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:30:00 AM

Thank you so much Rogers

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/7/2020 3:30:00 PM

Beautiful emotions expressed in your passionate muse Funom! Congratulations on your win :)

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:30:00 AM

Thank you so much Aditi.

James Horn

Date: 7/5/2020 7:55:00 PM

My 79th birthday was on June 26th. There is a difference between lust, love, seduction and emotion. Their differences are enough to make a good poem out of.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:30:00 AM

WOW! 79th you say? A big big congratulations to you my wonderful friend of almost a decade, here on soup. It is amazing and I can only imagine how you feel. We hope fo long life like yours and I still wish you more years of strength, good health, hapinness and peace.

Debjani Mitra

Date: 7/5/2020 4:08:00 AM

So good and interesting ..you hold the reader from beginning to end

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:29:00 AM

Thank you so much Debjani

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/4/2020 4:13:00 PM

Nice entry - all the best for the contest. Blessings sent your way, friend.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:28:00 AM

Thank you so much Regina Riddle

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/3/2020 5:38:00 AM

She sounds like a player; but his mother likes him; and he apparently likes her too. A very interesting poem my friend.

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:28:00 AM

Yes Caren, you have said it all.. Thank you very much.

Winged Warrior

Date: 7/2/2020 9:10:00 AM

Great entry Funom...hot! hot! hot!...best wishes and a cold shower lol...^WW^ :o)

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:28:00 AM

Thank you so much Winged Warrior

V. Deepa

Date: 7/1/2020 5:28:00 AM

Hello sir, You have beautifully penned.:-)with your unique style.My best wishes for your win.:-) Keep writing.Keep inspiring.:-) Have a nice day.Warmest regards~Deepa

Funom Makama
Date: 7/17/2020 6:27:00 AM

Thank you so much V. Deepa