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Love At First Sight

Love was in the air when he laid eyes on her. Childhood; elementary and even high school with her. Walking towards her, he greeted her. Anxiety spiraled as he hugged her. Conversation grew deeper as he sat with her. Wanting to get closer because he was falling for her. Another woman called pausing the time he was having with her. Knowing he had to answer; he stepped away and spoke to her. She stated that something wasn't quite right with her. She said that her stomach had been bothering her. Now he's thinking back if he came inside her. Thinking if she lied to him about her tubes being tied within her. Does he blame himself for listening to her? Knowing right from wrong and yet he can't blame her. Does he blame the devil for allowing him to be intimate with her? Is he not a human that makes mistakes just like her? Begging God to make a way for him and her. Asking God to forgive him for committing the sin with her. God said, "relax my son, you were only dreaming of her."

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Date: 11/26/2019 9:58:00 PM
it's so beautiful poem; lovingly penned
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Date: 11/5/2019 2:39:00 AM
Ha talk about good writing!;) I couldn't tell a story if my life depended on it! Haha like the ending though! Yes I can say thank god!;) but ya know! Loved this but what's new as you... comments are entertaining to say the least and knowing your a man of few words..so I will say the least.. love your work!;)
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Date: 7/7/2016 2:10:00 PM
rEALLY ENJOYED THIS WELL WRITTEN
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Date: 9/11/2014 8:23:00 AM
Very nice. Congrats. I couldn't find your comment to me about Haiku so I'm doing it this way (8>( Thank you. I just posted a new 'blog' with another Haiku for 9.11 best always, Trish
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Date: 4/27/2014 1:13:00 PM
Good read. I especially love the part of 'relax, you were only dreaming of her' and how the disconnect between stanza one and two shows it was a dream state. I never knew until the end though. Keep it up
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Date: 4/28/2014 8:28:00 AM
Thank you so kindly for the visit. This is one of my first writes when I got here on the Soup. Please feel free to check out my latest when you can. I'll stop by to visit you...Thanks again!
Date: 11/2/2012 1:46:00 PM
Post Script: I just got the "her" at the verses ends. That rocks! I gotta try that. Whadda ya call that, I'm just pencil, but your definitely a pen! re: "Love at first sight" andreatravis
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Date: 11/2/2012 1:41:00 PM
WOW! "Love at first sight". That blew me away. I feel like I got to peek inside your soul, just a small view of the beautiful and unexpected, YOU. Anticipating more! andreatravis
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Date: 7/28/2012 9:57:00 PM
"Conversation grew deeper as he sat with her...." I absolutely love it!! This flowed well. Great poem INK!!
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Date: 8/19/2012 6:49:00 AM
Thank you dearly Doreen...hugs!!!
Date: 6/19/2012 4:27:00 AM
One word for this,Pace~~ REFRESHING!! I'm loving it!xoxo-Melly
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Date: 6/19/2012 2:18:00 PM
Lol..Thank you for sharing with me!!
Date: 6/4/2012 7:09:00 PM
I REALLY like this! I REALLY like your poetry Pace <3
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Date: 6/4/2012 8:29:00 PM
Thank you beautiful!!! Hugs
Date: 6/2/2012 8:46:00 AM
This to me is heart written than hand written Pace G, i appreciate every of your kind comments on my page. Luv you.
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Date: 6/2/2012 9:18:00 AM
All smiles!!! Thank you dearly!!
Date: 6/2/2012 12:07:00 AM
"Wow... OMG!!!! wOW.... that was intence babe... thats all that i can say. Carma"
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Date: 6/2/2012 12:33:00 AM
Thank you madam Carma!!
Date: 5/18/2012 12:36:00 PM
Very nice...lol...msde me blush a lil
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Date: 5/18/2012 12:50:00 PM
lol..is that right?!..hmm!!!
Date: 5/18/2012 12:18:00 AM
Glad you enjoyed my Time And Chance poem, Pace. Interesting poem - quite a surprise at the end. Well written. God bless, Maureen
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Date: 5/18/2012 3:45:00 AM
Lol..well thank you!!
Date: 5/7/2012 7:37:00 PM
such trickery slick one.... I love this one. Your a bad man!!!! (smile).
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Date: 5/7/2012 7:41:00 PM
Lmao!! Glad you enjoyed it
Date: 4/25/2012 8:48:00 PM
I much enjoyed the originality and honesty of this poem. Well thought out and well written. I must say though often in dreams we come out luckier than in reality. Have a blessed life Huggs TLee
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Date: 4/26/2012 2:35:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts..you are so true..luv and hugs!!
Date: 4/24/2012 6:37:00 PM
WEll, that was great making it a dream, G. I imagine a guy feels very stressed hearing a woman say something is "not quite right" with her! I like how you made it into something ethical, discussing feelings of guilt and how it was a sin. That is refreshing to see!
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Date: 4/24/2012 7:55:00 PM
lol..Thank you..yes your are correct all the way!!
Date: 4/22/2012 2:39:00 PM
Sweet dreaming G. - well written poem. -oxox Anne-Lise
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Date: 4/22/2012 3:06:00 PM
Thank you beautiful for stopping by!! hugs
Date: 4/22/2012 9:41:00 AM
splendid write G....regards...Joseph
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Date: 4/22/2012 10:07:00 AM
Thanks a million!!! Always enjoy your presence.
Date: 4/21/2012 3:57:00 PM
Nice one G Pace...as usual... smiles.... chiquita
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Date: 4/21/2012 5:05:00 PM
Thank you sweetheart!!
Date: 4/21/2012 2:49:00 PM
Nice job G!! really good rythm...it raps good too ;)...just sayin... keep that pen movin' my friend--big hugs love deb
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Date: 4/21/2012 3:02:00 PM
Well thank you! If only I knew how to rap...lol
Date: 4/21/2012 12:08:00 PM
a wet dream? now i've read everything.
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Date: 4/21/2012 12:16:00 PM
Yes sir..thank you for stopping by.

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