Lost

Sitting quietly beneath the old blue gum tree Flowers surround me lined in neat rows on the lawn White and blue, tall and short placed as if by gods’ decree My eyes mist, oh god what she had undergone Her face clouded in pain, body still as a frightened fawn The room white, Spartan white sheets drape the bed Her raven black hair no more, so much left unsaid Eyes of fierce emerald green now dull and sedate God let fall tears the day her mortal coil she did shed Soon again in each others arms, standing at heaven’s gate Written 30/01/2015

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Emile Pinet

Date: 2/9/2015 7:32:00 PM

You have a talent and should write as much as you can to exercise your skills to a fine art....you have it in you to be notable. Great work. Emile. #7

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/9/2015 7:44:00 PM

I thank you very much for such a compliment. I have trouble sometimes to find the words I need to paint the image I see. I have been in a hyatus for a while now. Too sad to write. thank you again for your words of encouragement I truely do appreciate them. love Shane

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/31/2015 9:27:00 PM

now do I have good taste or what?? I see this is poem of the day!!! Congrats.

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 5:41:00 PM

You are truely a good judge, it did not occur to me that people would like it that much. Best feeling in the world to be told by poets whose work far out shines mine that I had penned something good. Thank you for the congrats. Love Shane xxx

Casarah Nance

Date: 1/31/2015 6:32:00 PM

Wonderful, great poem and awesome poem of the day choice, Hugs xxx

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 5:37:00 PM

Thanks Casarah, I did not expect this result. the poem mostly wrote itself i seemed to just be there for the ride. love Shane xxx

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 1/31/2015 3:58:00 PM

Congratulations on the poem of the day Shane! Verlena

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 5:19:00 PM

Thanks Verlena, i did not expect to have a POTD. love Shane xxx

David Meade

Date: 1/31/2015 1:14:00 PM

Well done good friend . . . I am a lover of trees and the blue gum tree was delightful to see . . . it has deep magic as does your poem that cast a spell on me!! 7

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 4:29:00 PM

Thank you David. I visit my families graves often and the cemetery is filled with beautiful blue gums, it is so peaceful there. Thankyou again for reading my work. love shane xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/31/2015 12:35:00 PM

- Shane, a happy day :) CONGRATULATIONS with P.O.T.D. !!!! - // hug // Anne-Lise :)

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 4:26:00 PM

Thank you Anne Lise. And yes it certainly brightened my day. I never expected POTD. love Shane xxx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/31/2015 11:05:00 AM

The love and pain you have expressed is breathtaking, sad, and beautiful all in one heartfelt poem...congrats on being chosen TPOD...it's well deserved!!

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 4:23:00 PM

Thank you for the kind words I did not expect the poem to be this well received. love Shane xxx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/31/2015 10:48:00 AM

This poem is so very lovely Shane. How wonderful it is POTD. Big Congratulations!

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 2:10:00 PM

Thank you for stopping buy to read my work. The POTD was totally unexpected. love Shane xxx

Constance La France

Date: 1/31/2015 9:45:00 AM

Shane, congratulations on being featured with this fantastic write ~~

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 1:33:00 PM

Thank you. It was not expected. love Shane xxx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/31/2015 9:28:00 AM

Congrats, my dear! See! You are being honored here. :) It's a lovely write. Came back to congratulate you.

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/31/2015 6:41:00 PM

Hi Eileen thanks for the congrat I really apreciate it .something up with my iPad though it keeps putting my comments in the wrong box. You have got my reply to Mary Jo. Love Shane

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/31/2015 6:37:00 PM

Thanks my lovely Kentucky country girl. Did not expect this so I am really happy, I feel like I am part of the family now. Real Chuffed!

Jean Omalley Polatnick

Date: 1/31/2015 8:48:00 AM

So good ... beautifully done, my friend! A 7+ and congratulations on POTD!

Shane Cooper
Date: 2/1/2015 6:47:00 AM

Thank you Jean, The poem came from deep in my heart. Love Shane xxx

Eve Roper

Date: 1/31/2015 8:20:00 AM

Congratulations on Poem of the Day, Shane. A 7, on a sorrowful picturesque write. Blessings Eve

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/31/2015 8:29:00 AM

Dear Jan I would not be writing poetry without your kindness. You are my inspiration my muse. I am forever in your debt my wonderful friend Love Shane xxx

Jan Allison

Date: 1/31/2015 6:54:00 AM

Many congrats on being featured for poem of the day I'm delighted for you:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/31/2015 8:36:00 AM

Dear Jan I would not be writing poetry without your kindness. You are my inspiration my muse. I am forever in your debt my wonderful friend. Love Shane xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 1/31/2015 6:38:00 AM

A serene and sorrowful piece...you penned this so elegantly Shane.... Congrats on being featured

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/31/2015 8:18:00 AM

Thank you Tim, I appreciate your coments. I never expected POTD . You guy's are so kind to new comers, and the way Jan took me under her wing even though she had so much on her plate . This is what community is all about. I am glad to have found you all. Shane xxx

Meg Anderson

Date: 1/30/2015 9:31:00 PM

Deeply sorrowful. But hope toward the end! Thank you for sharing your heart! Meg

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 9:40:00 PM

Thank you for reading my work Meg. I seem to find my mind always drifts towards the thought of loss and parting. Hence my sad writes. love Shane xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/30/2015 8:23:00 PM

gotta fave this one too!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/30/2015 8:22:00 PM

wow, what a picture you painted for us of a sad scene, this shell of a beautiful woman. I really liked this one. The mood it evokes is so poignant, Shane!!

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 8:30:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I read a poem by Broken wings and it gave me inspiration to write this. I had entered it in the Dizain comp but being silly me, i forgot about the syllable count as i fell into the poem. So a dizain that is not quite a dizain. I have withdrawn it. I read your dizain poem, absolutly superb! A sure first. Love Shane xxx

Constance La France

Date: 1/30/2015 10:10:00 AM

Shane, your poem is full of deep pain, I know this pain of losing someone loved and being unable to do a thing to change the end, beautifully written and best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting my poetry ~~

Constance La France
Date: 1/30/2015 5:36:00 PM

Shane, I am so honoured that my poem inspired you to write this wonderful poem, that is what we as poets hope to achieve it makes me so proud, thank you so much ~~

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 4:39:00 PM

i wrote this after I had read your poem "and that comes from within" I could not get the images it created out of my mind, so so sad yet such inner peace was there. You were my muse for what I have written. Thank you. Love Shane xxx

Jan Allison

Date: 1/30/2015 10:03:00 AM

Very beautiful Shane but oh so sad - I haven't even attempted this form! into faves and a 7 - good luck in the contest

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 4:28:00 PM

My dear friend Jan thank you for reading my work, to loose someone who you love from your life is always such a sad thing as we both know. This was just putting the hurt into context. Stay safe. Love Shane

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/30/2015 9:34:00 AM

Oh....sad, but beautiful...Shane, this is a superb write. You are a wonderful poet.

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 4:21:00 PM

Thank you my enchantress for your words. But it is you who are the wonderful poet your words far exceed anything created with brush by Van Gough. I but make poor attempts in comparison. Love Shane xxx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/30/2015 9:07:00 AM

You have draped this in a beautiful sadness. This is an exceptional piece of writing.

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 4:14:00 PM

Thank you for your Kind words. I had not written for a week and needed to let go. This was the result. Shane xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/30/2015 6:41:00 AM

- When the words disappeared ..... words that comforted .... words that gave hope at heavens gate - Touching and beautiful poem Shane - I wish you a happy weekend :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/30/2015 6:50:00 AM

and to you also Anne Lise,... thank you for taking time to visit. Your commemts are always appreciated :) love Shane xxx