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Loneliness

Loneliness Barren the wasteland flowed in front of my feet. Nothing save a pebble in this desert does repeat. And behind me years lost in my embattled defeat. Time lost forgetting the taste of bread. Time lost forgetting kisses on my son's head. So much inside me is dead. and every day the sky is muted grey like that little girl ignored by her father like that skinny dog with no shelter every day lasts a year and every year a lifetime to bare in front of my feet nothing everywhere (written for the poetry contest titled LONELINESS) 7/27/16

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Date: 7/30/2016 10:39:00 AM
Perfect poem. Nice words. If you want read my poems and tell me your comments...
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Seth Diamond
Date: 8/1/2016 2:48:00 PM
I really need help critiquing this poem. It is about being a poet, but it might be great or insulting. Please help me. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_poet_783319
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Seth Diamond
Date: 7/30/2016 10:48:00 AM
I will read yours. Thanks. about one third of my posts are from a play I wrote in rhyme and meter, and these are all indicated by act 2, or scene 4 ect. Just so you know these are not stand alone poems.
Date: 7/28/2016 12:12:00 PM
My favorite line in this poem is, "In front of my feet nothing everywhere." Validates the epitome of Loneliness.
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Seth Diamond
Date: 8/1/2016 2:48:00 PM
I really need help critiquing this poem. It is about being a poet, but it might be great or insulting. Please help me. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_poet_783319
Date: 7/27/2016 10:40:00 PM
I am in love with your poem which unfortunately / fortunately resonates with me. I feel it, I know it and through you, have been reunited from an unique and dramatically delivered angle. To me, the first stanza are words flowing eloquently from a mature deep soul, then the second is delivered as if through a pouting child, their lips stuck out. I'm leaving a 7 ... CayCay
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Seth Diamond
Date: 8/1/2016 8:05:00 PM
Beats me what happened to it. It was posted and now I cannot find it.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 7/29/2016 8:39:00 PM
Seth: I cannot find a contest for Loneliness, will you clue me in? What am I missing? Thanks in advance ... CayCay

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