Liars' Moon

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I was reading a song-writing teacher's website about metaphors, about pairing unassociated words together to convey a third idea. Suddenly I had the idea about a Liar's Moon, then expanded to the idea of making false promises beneath a Liars' Moon. I decided to go in the direction of the song remade by Tony Orlando and Dawn called He Don't Love You (Like I Love You), which originally was called He Will Break Your Heart by Jerry Butler, Calvin Carter, and Curtis Mayfield.

This is a first draft without a melody so far.

Liars’ Moon Seems we’ve been friends forever. I think you know what I feel – That we should be together, Because what we have is real. This guy has come between us. I don't know how you feel. I’m not sure what he’s after, But I don’t think he’s sincere. He misleads you with laughter To keep you from hearing clear, And blinds your eyes with stardust. He’s somebody you should fear. Chorus: He flatters you with practiced lies Meant to entice and thrill. He admits nothing, only implies-- Luring you into his will. His cold-hearted kisses, and his Pied-Piper's tune, Are just sunshine promises beneath a Liars' Moon. I want you to consider What each of us means to you. Who should be in your future, And who wants the best for you. Who you can really count on; Who'll be your truest true-blue.

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Casarah Nance

Date: 4/21/2017 6:46:00 AM

This is situation that occurs frequently and your writing could apply to so many, it is really good, and meaningful. well done.

Mark J. Halliday
Date: 4/21/2017 11:15:00 AM

Thanks Casarah. Let's see if I can make it sing.