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Jack Allen was a serious, shy schoolboy, who worked hard at school lessons; Like mottled skies working hard each day, to convey many color obsessions. Jack was a little small for his age, and had begun to feel somewhat bullied; For ofttimes, he took no part in rough sports. Still, he'd race at great speed! He loved most the adventure in books, and Sis loved reading, just as much; And sympathized with Jack's social bind, like rainbows, which keep in touch! The funtastic friends next door visited, amidst fierce, fatal, fall fruit flavors- A flashback on fine, green grandeur, 'ere awaiting a return of red sun favors. Father and Mother were fine role models, like fiery mountain to flowery hill. Other family came by frequently, like fresh February, spring promise thrills! They lived in the house of visions, when moon and sun, at times, dyed walls; With no two dream days ever the same, and wren songs floating in the halls. Carriages rolled peach sunrise to strawberry sundown, on their street, sunny; Next to saffron poppy fields that siblings gamboled. And summer sang sultry! Other neighbors nestled under their nut trees, talking of news and novelties; In their backyard of nectarine noon, of frilly flowers, and golden bumblebees. Cat's eye blooms viewed milky clouds, loving the creamy stars at sable night; As flamingo blooms danced with breeze, and tiger in a flower, leapt into sight! Hot summer sun made prairie smoke bloom, as blue sapphire plants sparkled; And 'mother of millions' was giving birth, when travelers palm trees goggled. One afternoon, school bullies gave Jack a dare, at which he failed miserably. He'd grown rusty, as his attention lay elsewhere; like fall flowers, dying lovely. How the naughty schoolboys laughed, before they gave Jack one more dare; And Sis whispered words in his ear, lost to anyone else found standing there. 'Jack, be nimble, Jack be quick, Jack, jump over the candlestick!' goaded Sis; And resolute Jack, leapt higher than anyone before this-sadness turnt to bliss! Stunned breathless, every child cheered, like the lauded, first gold leap year; And Jack became a legend for jumping, as he had no more trepidation or fear! With older Sis ever present to encourage him, Jack accomplished every dare; And like green birds of turquoise sky, popular Jack was admired everywhere! At 'Jack, be nimble, Jack be spry, Jack, jump over the apple pie,' Jack leapt; Up towards blue sky he swept-past green spots, where scarlet nestlings slept! At 'Jack, be nimble, Jack, jump high, Jack, fly up into the sky,' Jack really did. At least the legend states, Jack did; like musky, rose night, where truth is hid!

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Date: 5/20/2024 4:37:00 PM
Another cool take on a nursery rhymes or you just love the name Jack? Jack and the beanstalk absolutely must be next. You're a talented poetess Evelyn
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/20/2024 8:33:00 PM
I never realized before how many Jacks frequent the nursery rhymes, lol. Jack and the beanstalk, you say? Now, that's intriguing. Thank you for your kind compliments and appreciation. ;)
Date: 5/20/2024 4:41:00 AM
Dear Judy, such a wonderful, captivating journey through Jack Allen's world, blending nature with the story of overcoming adversity. I loved how the colorful descriptions and rhythmic verses create a plethora of emotions, making Jack's transformation from shy schoolboy to fearless legend truly inspiring. Your ability to write such a rich, imaginative narrative is absolutely remarkable. It's a joy to read and experience. - Blessings, Daniel
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/20/2024 8:26:00 PM
Thank you for your glowing remarks, dear friend. It was a pleasure reading your warm, uplifting words today. So glad you enjoyed my tale. Have a wonderful week. :)
Date: 5/19/2024 5:47:00 AM
I am glad you found a story for your long couplets story. I wrote in Maltese some novels but gave it up as I lost my muse. Hopefully, you will not lose yours. Lovely rhymes and vision and great storytelling. Victor.
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Date: 5/19/2024 9:30:00 PM
Thank you for your very pleasing comments. So nice to hear you enjoyed this tale. It's quite impressive that you've written novels. Too bad about losing your muse, though. Maybe it will return. I hope your week is nice. :)
Date: 5/18/2024 1:39:00 PM
This poem turned around in a delightful way. Each person has a talent. Sometimes they don't know it.
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Date: 5/18/2024 9:03:00 PM
Thank you for your kind expressions, Hilda. Blessings and hugs. :)
Date: 5/18/2024 7:13:00 AM
Great storytelling Evelyn, your poem is a beautifully crafted tale of perseverance, familial support, and personal triumph. It captures the reader's imagination with its rich imagery and heartfelt narrative, celebrating the journey from fear to fearlessness.
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/18/2024 9:03:00 PM
Thank you for the lasting thrill of of your delightful words, Silent One. Your enjoyment of this tale brings feelings of happiness. Blessings.
Date: 5/18/2024 5:42:00 AM
Quite an inspiration you convey in this story, Evelyn. ---'Jack, be nimble, Jack be quick, Jack, jump over the candlestick!' goaded Sis; And resolute Jack, leapt higher than anyone before this-sadness turned to bliss!---Words that uplift a life!
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Date: 5/18/2024 8:57:00 PM
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this poem, Vijay. It's such a pleasure to know you enjoyed reading it. Your wonderful compliments did make me smile. :)
Date: 5/18/2024 1:44:00 AM
I like poems like this one dear Evelyn, such originality in the your rhymes and alliterations and storytelling! Which is rare and precious in todays world! I enjoyed reading this! You always come up with an interesting one that keeps readers engaged from the very first line! Exquisite work as always! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/18/2024 8:48:00 PM
As a child, nursery rhymes filled me with wonder and delight, and also fired my imagination. At times though, one wonders what happened in the before and after of that moment in which the nursery rhyme takes place. This story was so fun to write, dear Ink, and your lovely, inspiring remarks has made it even more fun! Thanks so much for your comments, and for sending me light. Many blessings.

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